I stood in the storm and swallowed the sky...

Tornado sirens sounded and I went outside to feel the sky wrap around me…

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sirens, first low-humming

rising, shrieking strumming at the sky

white fire scream-streaking growing

burning through the atmosphere

come the drums of flame

fierce burning, rumbling, deep

trembling clouds hovering

dancing in slow-motion tremors

frantic feelings fade to sacred awe

in the crispness of the air

scented breezes thrust and rush

breathing over my skin

tasting electricity in the wind

the earth alive and moving

birds soft-still and silent

as rain flees Cheshire clouds in panic

I stood in the storm

and swallowed the sky…

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Oh my goodness- how the lack of punctuation flows and scream into wildness! You've captured the moments, the weather, the atmosphere, the terror, then, almost unbelievably described the gradual calm after the tornado, the settling, the slowing,'tasting electricity in the wind ~ the earth alive and moving'; then .. that last line, that gloriously vast last line, '.. and swallowed the sky...' A very different style from you but as fine as ever was. Great picture too, following your Alice theme, plus a relevant poem because of the weather in parts of your country.

Many thanks for sharing, Craig!

[Natasha]

I like how dream-like and fantasy filled this is- but yet it could be real also. You have great descriptive words and it flowed nicely making the reader think along the way because of the bold words in the beginning. nice job!

[lee von cleef]

Swallowed the sky, I well up with tears, yes you are .How does it feel to be? Great poem.

[The dark story]

awesome.this is such a great work..you have put such a beautiful poem before us..
"
come the drums of flame

trembling clouds hovering

I stood in the storm
and swallowed the sky…

frantic feelings fade to sacred awe"

these lines really took me by surprise and awe.each and every lines in the poem carries a deep meaning and you have elegantly described the everything .......i really love reading your poem..hays off to you....

[Geminair]

Wow really loved this! I guess i might by bias though as i have witnessed those very same Skies myself,(Well Cheshire U.k.) however never would i have been able to put it so beautifully dramatic and colourfull as you have here.
you have given a perfect definition of "the sky is always beautiful even when it falls"

Thank you for the Share.

[Eve]

wow, this is just gorgeous, what can I say that I haven't said before, stunning visuals, and the feeling of being one with the storm is breath taking...I love t-storms , and I loved this poem!

[light and ashes]

Wow, amazing,breath taking, and brilliant poetry. I love that you refer to the clouds as Cheshire clouds. That is my favorite part of this poem, 100

Goodness, such a magniff write again,
you're quite the marvellous poet eh?

"I stood in the storm and sawllowed the sky"

My summary of the last verse
In the heat in the midst of july

Very poetic person, your writes are deep & profound
kinda like Shakespere.

[William Maisonave]

" and swallowed the sky..." took me by suprise and ended this poem perfectly.

[Eric Cox]

Paints a picture with intense and vibrant imagery. Creative and cool pen upon this piece.

[closed..acct]

tasting electricity in the wind
the earth alive and moving
birds soft-still and silent
as rain flees Cheshire clouds in panic
I stood in the storm
and swallowed the sky…

Such prolific words and depth!!
Emotional as well, I could feel the rush here.
Awesome write!