As if dust were diamonds

 

 

 

 

Breathing,

air running circles

around you…

And my eyes

catching fireflies

in slowing motion…

Emerald emotions

caress my memory,

piecing me into you

fragment by fragment…

Webs laced in liquid

filling in the spaces;

hollowed time

where there had been

only gray empty…

And you come

stand in my mind,

changing everything

as if dust were diamonds…

Reviews

[sarah]

this is so sweet! oh my I love it great write!

[emmajoy]

'And you come ~ stand in my mind, ~ changing everything ~ as if dust were diamonds…' .. how beautiful is that, dear sir. I think you could make even an ugly thought seem wonderful; you have the knack of making mind pictures by placing words in exactly the right position.

[Cherrie Palmer]

lovely ..Webs laced in liquid filling in the spaces; hollowed time.. and balance in our lives makes the lovely even more beautiful.

[Mark]

If I'm reading this aright, you seem to be saying that you are aware of certain beautiful scenes and creations around you, but they seem not to make sense as a contiguous whole until the arrival of the She, who brings it all into focus and reveals the underlying plan. A kind of a "Lean-Back-In-Your-Chair-And-Go-"WO!" write, bud. Nice work!

[Marie Harrison]

Nice spiralling poem.

[Kesha]

Wow Craig you've done it again, you really amaze me! This is a wonderful piece of work, I love the last line.... As if dust were diamonds... Thats amazing! wonderful job! :)

[Judy Ponceby]

Simply exquisite, beautiful. I don't have a favorite line even, it's all perfect. Beautiful contrasted imagery, unexpected comparisons :)