NO LONGER ALONE

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

In the hollow of my haven

where the moonlight flees the shadow,

a place of darkness once embraced me

and my dreams were of no comfort.

 

In a crowd I stood alone,

shifting silently for shelter,

and in hunger for affection

clung to glances of false pity.

 

Cryptic cries and aberrations,

swifted past my vision’s window.

Then my hungry hand reached out

and I grasped for life incarnate.

 

Quiet beauty now surrounds me

with the color of life’s hope.

And the hovering hordes are fled

down cruel Hades deepest slopes.

 

With the unexpectedness

of dancing summering snow,

I glance beside my path to see

my shadow now no longer lone.

Reviews

[Muse]

Symbolic on so many levels. The artist in me loves a good poem with a great photo. It's sad on so many levels. Message being we all at times feel like an empty canvas or an empty shoe................

[Michael Carr]

Excellent piece froman, as always you are one of the few writers wo capture poetry with strong voice that is free of cliches and refreshing in subtlety.
I'd move the first line down a spot as it intercuts with the picture (nice pic, but I felt it didn't really add anything. The piece itself should stand alone)

You say "down Hades deepest slope" Hades is a character, not a place, and if you meant Hades as being the owner of the slope it needs to be (Hades')

I especially loved the second set of lines

[Kenneth Sibbett]

This is just so good it's scary. I read a few of your poems, you have a gift. I've only been studying poetry for a couple of years, I went a lifetime thinking it was useless. How wrong I was. I now know what I have missed all my life. I'm trying to catch up but theres never enough time. But reading your writings is an education!

[writing mojo]

Such a creepy photo, it sends shivers down my spine, but adding your words to equations the empty shoes on the pavement had life..I like how you compared your darkness as a shadow following you where ever you go..."Hades deepest slopes" and "Cryptic cries": are a good choice of words to express the trials and tribulation of your life...good stuff

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

beautiful, emotional and makes your mind wander into deep corners.

[Ladysue]

oh this brings hope when most needed...i agree it is always darkest before the dawn...you have fantastic images in this piece...love the last verse...

[George Korolog]

Craig, I really liked connection with the moonlight shadow in the beginning and the ending "shadow no longer alone." I thought that this piece was brutal in it's openess in the second stanza. This was nicely done.

[Brianna Brie]

Cryptic cries and aberrations,
swifted past my vision’s window.
Then my hungry hand reached out
and I grasped for life incarnate.

There are many great lines in this poem. Enjoyed reading it.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Craig, this makes me feel so sad even though the ending is so uplifting.
So many people can relate to the feelings you write so well.. desolation, feeling alone , alienated.. such a gift you have so happy to know you and be able to read wonderful poetry such as yours.
A happy ending .. always a good thing.

Chloe

[Siddhartha]

it is usually the darkest before dawn. this is a wonderful write, 'cause it speaks of thew the human spirit and of the fierce resilience that is almost always the harbinger of glory.a never ending and lingering hope pervades this poem.