The sun is jealous

Based on a true story... or so says I...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Ì Hush golden sun is jealous of your smile     

Burns muted hot in your warmth for awhile…

 

Ì And wild ocean steals color from your eyes

In your stirring shadows, the blue waves rise…

 

Ì How the whistling wind whispers your name

Haunts deeping forests, dances blossoming plains…

 

Ì Each step you take caressingly skates the earth

Startling stones of fire lust quiver in untamed mirth…

 

Ì Thunderous chants in emotions of earth and isles

Hushed golden sun is so jealous of your smile…

 

Reviews

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well Craig you have done it again. You must be a romantic.
This is so romantic and just flows so easily.
Makes me imagine a man telling this to his woman as she lays there with her eyes closed. gosh
wow great poem
Thanks for sharing with me
Look forward to the next

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Beautiful imagery. Captures your thoughts and emotions and sets a portrait of the poem. Great job.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Very sweet and elegant..

[cfix]

Craig this is such a lovely write here, I think it's passionate really. Such emotions entangled. Love this write. You have a most lovely pen you write with.

[Desert Dreamer]

Like a goddess of the Earth...I generally don't care for love poems, but this is amazing, a love poem and more...we are all gods and goddesses of the Earth at times, if we pay attention and see the world with our true feelings, see each other colored with emotion and sunshine...

[Alicia Schroeder]

This is a beautiful poem..I'm at aww... Lost for words, Absolutely AMAZING!!

[Angel Bird]

And wild ocean steals color from your eyes
In your stirring shadows, the blue waves rise…

How the whistling wind whispers your name
Haunts deeping forests, dances blossoming plains…

The flames and pictures your words ignite are of pure love and beauty. They burn throughout each line and every wondrous image. The fire of untamed love marvelously exposed... an ice-melting smile it must be...

[Liza]

ah jealousy - wonderful title - i also love the sun since i'm a fire sun sign...so the title drew me in and the rest was bright, brilliant and bold when describing emotion and contrasting with imagery

[EmpressPoetess]

SIGH!!!!!!! Sooo romantic, so sweet, so creative and poetic...This is what poetry means, this means what poetry is! putting this in my faves!!

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I agree, you must be a romantic!

I always love the way you put the font just right as well as the picture to go with the poem. It emulates the all ready lovely thought you try to get across. :)

[deeps]

This is so wonderful, i like the rhyme scheme, the meter, and the sysbols at the begining of each stanza. Very well written and thought out piece.