THE EDGE OF HAPPY

I think I can see it from here... :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

On a marble ledge gazing down

Gray cold edge; indigo loneliness

A glass of All-Irish Black and Tan

Taking sips rich and dark as night

I hear a soft golden voice within

Feel the kiss of a scented breeze

Turn to see your smile light the room

I feel colored in carnival electric

Do you see me standing here?

Not breathing as I steal glimpses

Heart coming alive in your tone

Your laugh, what a brilliant caffeine

On the sunrise edge of happy now

At least I can finally see it from here

It’s resting across the room in your eyes

Please just look my way forever...

Please…

 

Reviews

[Bette]

well done on this, very sweet. everyone wants to be seen...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

one of the most straightfoward and honest writes I've had the pleasure to encounter~ the scene is set with perfect care before the reader and the players brought to life through the narrator's view with emotive thoughtfulness~

[Ru Banerjee]

This is such irresistibly intoxicating Craig! Such a brilliant picture of a seductive carnival you paint with your words:
"Gray cold edge; indigo loneliness
A glass of All-Irish Black and Tan
Taking sips rich and dark as night
I hear a soft golden voice within
Feel the kiss of a scented breeze
Turn to see your smile light the room
I feel colored in carnival electric"...
There is this enchanting world of wine and passion, the dazzle of partying amidst the rich, surreal darkness of the night, and in the midst of this grandeur, your 'indigo' loneliness and quest for the richness of a romantic entanglement. Its as if I can clearly see you 'on the sunrise edge of happy', waiting with a bated breath to linger forever in the luscious eyes of your beloved. Lovely work once again!

[Ferg]

dazzling piece, craig!

[Fran Marie]

Blissfully romantic in lovely poetic verse,

as always a smooth flowing piece so elegantly penned~Kudos

[Valentine]

Lovely write as always..lol and God bless..Kathie

[Dinesh Sairam]

More like a sunrise pictured. And that, well worded. But I think it's 'Edge of happiness'.. 'Happy' is only an adjective. Have a nice day =) Keep writing.

[TamiViolet]

Your imagery is rich in tone and mood...

'Do you see me standing here?'...

Craig, I hope she continues to look your way... Life is lonely so much of the time for so many people....wonderful people... I'm sure your piece opens eyes for many... Love the voice here...

[emmah]

ah - the edge of happy - seems like such an enchanting place to be in - 'resting across the room in your eyes' - stunning - what a lovely piece of work this is - it's like being on a surreal ride - the ebbs and flows are mesmerizing - and that end - it's a smile - and what a 'please...' that is - love the flow and love the mood of this one - :) - there it is - a smile - for the possibility - of the edge of happy!!!

[Sean M. Addams]

I like the mood of this piece... imagery was great and like the romantic tones.. overall great job ..fav line ...Heart coming alive in your tone
Your laugh, what a brilliant caffeine