At a loss for words

Just a glimpse at me…

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lost

I’m at a loss for words

All those nouns and verbs

I see her there

Across the sea of humanity

Within a room that smells like time

Baked at 450

For thirty minutes

She smiles sunshine

Laughs like lyrics

To the best song

And to see her dance?

Oh, it’s like the world come alive

Like springtime swallowing winter

I love everything about her

Even when she’s angry

I see that fire in her eyes

And it ignites me

She’s my one dream

All my dreams in one basket

It seems

Can’t imagine being

With anyone else

Not another one like her

In all the world

What?

Would she be better off without me?

What kind of question is that?

Fumbling now

Tumbling recollections

Stumbling over my words

Maybe

I don’t like to think about it

Takes my breath away

No matter what though

No matter what anyone says

My heart is hers

It can’t be otherwise

If I know anything it’s that

But for now

I’m at a loss for words

Maybe just lost…

 

Author's Note

Not my best by far... just words I had to say.. every one of them true...

Reviews

[Onyx_Rayne]

First of all, I'll address your "note"... each piece I've read from you has been different - each and every one.. so I would definitely NOT say this isn't your best. All of your work is equally great and I, personally, enjoy every word.

Now, for the write. The flow of this piece is amazing... it brings forth relaxation twirling with emotions of love and adoration... also, a bit of mystery. You give away all of your feelings, but leave the reader wondering...holding back a bit of information, but not holding back one iota of emotion - It's absolutely beautiful.

I do have a favorite part that I feel I must point out because, it made me smile..haha

"Within a room that smells like time
Baked at 450
For thirty minutes
She smiles sunshine" -LOVE IT!

As always, it was a joy to read from you... perfectly penned :)

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Why doubt her? If she"s good enough to write, she"s good enough to read! chuckles...sometimes simplicity is the key :)

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

This is a very sensual and alluring write that touched my heart...I am glad that I chose to read this one..To be loved by someone so deeply would be a wonderful relationship ...I enjoyed that picture, also...Have a great day! Sunflower

[Jeff]

Not your best? It's still incredible.

[Marie Harrison]

Wow, that's quite a poem. I think it's an amazing poem to me.

[Rory CJ Frankson]

I like the lost turn of phrase... sounds like, she's a keeper.

[Geralyn Miller]

So lovely, flows like golden honey on a sun-ripened peach. Impressive.
Most women dream of being loved like this.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Best? Each one of Your poems is beautiful in a different way...it is difficult to compare...having said that...
This poem is truly brilliant..to be at a loss for words..I can relate...the sentiment of maybe I'm not good enough...
These lines -I see her there
Across the sea of humanity
Within a room that smells like time
Baked at 450
For thirty minutes
Are just incredibly different..and I like them..And I like how honestly You put forth Your feelings..it is a poem with an adorable message :)

[Bunnycorn]

It's very touching that you would put your work out there. :) I"m glad that you did...It sort of lets us get a look into your world. :)

[Dana Kathryn]

This is a lovely poem, It flows very well,it is very sincere and from the heart! :)

[allwrite]

If not your best, it comes very close. I love this piece.
AW