Footsteps

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

My darling, I can only    hope and pray this reaches you. Last   one. I’m the  last one… Have all their     bodies ˜ here.. around me. It’s a    nightm are   .  night ma re

So many attacked    us in the night. Pinned   us in these rocks.. lost a lot of blood.. and they’re sti ll close. Can hear    them shouting. Tryin g to th i n k  of yo u. to smi le. So beau ti ful you ar e  to  me.    

I’m ˜   not afraid  to die.. I’m dead    already.. fingers jus t won’t stop writing.. I’m just    afraid I won’t see you    again.. and never see our new baby˜.. Let her know her   daddy will always watch over her.. that I tried     so hard to    fight back..we all did..   to   ˜do what’s right. Tell her to never give up.. no matter  ho w  many  tell he r  it ca n’t  be do ne.

Growing weak.. God   have mercy on our souls… I hear    footsteps.. closer now.. someone here..  my God  . Dar li   n g I l  ov e  ˜  ˜ 

 

Reviews

[Jenny Nelson]

Wow. How beautiful. How sad. How powerful, especially with the set up. Very effectual. Excellent piece.

[Khaaki]

its wonderful craig... a note out of a diary... d agony of being helpless in d face of perennial attack... i can really relate to this... this may not hav been penned down earlier.... but d scenario u depict is commonplace in my homeland...

[Jillian Alexis]

wow this is really powerful and emotional. so many people go through this, losing a loved one at war. i really love what you did here, its like you can picture it and your heart is yearning for the person...and his family. fabulous write

[Hamkar]

I can see he has things to say but this is all he can say. He is growing weak. Its up to us to decide how he passed on, if the letter reached her, how the baby grew. Its up to us to finish the story. I like that sort of story, that lets us discover what would, could or should happen to the letter and each character. Well Done. It is filled with emotion, love, hope, wishing. I like this.

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so many have fallen, this is poignant and a little uncomfortable to read (in a good way) we take so much for granted until life is ebbing away...you have captured a moment beautifully. I'm humbled.

[Onyx_Rayne]

Would but we all had the opportunity to let the ones we love know it before we pass...

This piece is very good... filled with the deepest of human emotion - the emotion that one feels when in the grips of their own mortality.

The authentic look of the text and the smattering of blood droplets only add to the read.

While, I"m certain the writer died, I can't help but wonder how... and did he suffer.. and I hope that his love did, in fact, get the letter.

Beautifully penned :)

[Tina Kline]

This is intense, its as if the enemy is about to find him and he's trying to get his last words down and the way you wrote makes it even more real. Very emotional. I hope he survived, that he wasn't found but over looked by who ever it is that's approaching. Very impressive.

[Sean M. Addams]

a very deep read ..i like the format of this piece alot..very creative..overall i thought you did a great job expressing yourself in this piece.. a very impressive write

[Amy Bumpas]

This is sad, and left one wondering what happened to the man.
I thought it was so enduring and telling that the man thought of
no one but the baby and his love. So romantic as well in a strange
way.