In the quiet of your eyes

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

In the desperate hour,

when hope is cloaked

 in shadowed substance,

when worlds collide

in frantic feelings

of scarlet skies,

I walk and wait

and listen for life,

breathing the fragile,

frosted air of mortal lungs.

And piercing the fated fabric

of misery unvoiced,

listening for deeper melodies

and seeing near silent hues,

I survey eternal treasures

in the sea,

the sand,

each drifting, clouded sky.

I view those sacred glories

in the quiet of your eyes...

 

 

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

in frantic feelings
of scarlet skies,

I like your unusual combination of words in the above lines. Scarlet skies can be felt. It gives a concrete picture for frantic feelings.

I survey eternal treasures
in the sea,
the sand,

It is all so lovely. Beautiful words. It seems to me that it is not all peaches and cream, but life instead. Yet, there is something of value found in her and seen within her eyes. This poem is down to earth and yet in the heavens.

[Lilly]

Rich and beautiful - love allows us to live in another (...if that makes any sense...) Wonderful poem.

[emmajoy]

What beautiful words .. so much emotion .. one of your very best. Beautifully presented too.

[Amy Bumpas]

This to me is mysterious, sensual, like on a quiet hunt in
whispers. Once again, I really like the elogance.

[emma]

Soft and tender, yet amazingly powerful and as always, very beautiful.

[Alicante lullaby]

very quietly you made us her hear those deeper melodies...enchanting as always.

[Wicahpi]

I like the figure this poem took shape into.
Was that on purpose or by sheer coincidence?
It's shapely, like a woman's body.

The last line sums all of this write up completely.
Pretty perfect!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You are certainly taking your talents to another level again... I would call this breathtakingly melancholy.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Such a beautiful poem....so elegant....it says so much in such carefully chosen words...i absolutely love the poem...and you so delicately crafted it...with as much love as a craftsman might embellish a piece of fabric...the words float in my mind like a dream....and lastly i like that picture a lot...:)

[deeps]

This is a wonderful and beuatiful write here.