In the quiet of your eyes

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

In the desperate hour,

when hope is cloaked

 in shadowed substance,

when worlds collide

in frantic feelings

of scarlet skies,

I walk and wait

and listen for life,

breathing the fragile,

frosted air of mortal lungs.

And piercing the fated fabric

of misery unvoiced,

listening for deeper melodies

and seeing near silent hues,

I survey eternal treasures

in the sea,

the sand,

each drifting, clouded sky.

I view those sacred glories

in the quiet of your eyes...

 

 

Reviews

[Emily Paige]

wow I would say I love the way you write but that's not fully what i thought when I was done reading this and my reviews are my first thought after reading this was i like the way your mind works which makes this beautiful amazing poem.

[Ishan Sadwelkar]

The flow is really beautiful. And there is a subconscious romanticist trill to it.

[Francesca]

wow. i wish i could live in your mind while you're writing a poem one time.
the way you put together words is so intricate yet beautiful and you have such a good description in this poem, and all of your poems, it's just amazing! i love it!

[Nirmala]

I was scooped up by the very first couple of lines ‘In the desperate hour when hope is clocked...’ The poem has sadness expressed so profoundly and then building to the end. ‘......in the quiet of your eyes...’ oh you make relationships exceedingly sensitive...!

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

This is beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

~True

[Sam Severn]

These words read like they have been carved in stone, for thousands of years....like they are immortal n' eternal...."when worlds collide/in frantic feelings/of scarlet skies"....WOW! POW!!! ㋡

[A.Lee]

Breathtaking... I love the descriptions and imagery in this piece. Everything beautiful, everything good, you can see in their eyes... This has a crystal-like feel to it... Pure, clear, and beautiful. Great job.

[Doreen]

So many thoughts running through my mind as I read this. It's beautiful. This is poetry.

[AtticusBlack]

"When worlds collide" - they so often do, creating an array of effects on both worlds. This poem just made me think about emotion and how people portray their feelings etc. Often you can tell a lot about someone in their eyes, or the silence of their eyes? Deep write, I really liked it.

[THE LOST ROSE]

Wow this came across like a piano solo. It was clear and priceless. The imagery with the word play was excellent. If this was a meal you put your foot into it. Thanks for creating and sharing. I am looking forward to reading more of your work.