Only Olive Green Eyes...

A moment all my heart craves... Remix from the past...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

     Out my frosted window a red beam pierces the clouds as quilted, gray blankets cover the earth.  She is there, on the shore, her figure wrapped in the wisping gray.

     My window shrieks as it opens, and the sharpness of sea and salt fill my mind.  The circling birds swim the currents of air and cry to one another, as the whispering sea foam drapes the sandy shore.

     My heart ceases as she glances at me.  For a moment, I cease.

     The sand colored wood claws at my feet as I move toward the sea, and toward her piercing gaze.

  

This morning I breathe iced air,  

And wander toward the waves.

For a moment I live without care;

a moment all my heart craves.    

 

    The earth turns to reveal her lily face.  There is no longer ocean, only olive green eyes…

Reviews

[Seren]

Wow, what magic! I love the sense of the universe dropping away in the face of the olive-eyed woman [literally!] I think this is something between a poem and a drabble/short story, and it has all the more richness n' strangeness for it. To me, it feels somehow more real than straight verse would.

The narrator's enthralled, so am I - well done! ^_^

[Dane Osborne]

I'm impressed:) very whimsical and almost dreamlike imagery. You have a great with with words and descriptions. As far as constructive criticism goes i have nothing to offer which means that there is nothing wrong with it so kudos:)

[darem aq.]

Astonishing ! remarkable as expected, your method o delivering emotions flawless.
loved the vague theme, nature and atmosphere this piece implies.
great poem Craig ! keep it up =]

[Fallen Angel]

Wow as always brilliant! thank you for sharing and showing us this beauty =)

[Sorry Infamous]

As always you make me fall in love with love. Your words are embers.

[Jenna]

Very vivid. I love being able to see what I read clearly. And with your work thats always accomplished

[Alicante lullaby]

ohhh...i;m speechless....saw those olive green eyes...

[Rogelio Chavez]

Excellent Poem, Breathtaking.

[angelina neves]

baeutiful!

[MagiCrystal]

Perfection... as always ..

[Emily B]

your work is always so perfect and lovely