I want to linger...

I want to linger...

A Poem by An owl on the moon
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Random streams of thought on us...

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Fragrance of cinnamon bark

Over your swaying arcs

That dress slipping seamless…

I listen to your truffle giggles

Watch your lil wiggles

I love to dance to you…

On your skin, rhymes and verse

Freckles unrehearsed

Love reading your poetry…

Your soft midnight lips

The swaying curve of your hips

Saying hello to mine…

I want to linger

Wrapped ‘round your finger

No place I’d rather be…

You are sung

On my untamed tongue

Your name tastes like summer…

I don’t wanna miss

A single kiss

Or the scent of you in my dreams…

The architecture of you

Your form and style construe

We make the perfect us

© 2010 An owl on the moon


Author's Note

An owl on the moon
My thoughts tend to have different fonts… :)

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Dear Craig Froman,

I normally do not read things unless I am urged to read something whether it be through email or read request, but I finally gave into all of those small status updates about you having this as your featured poem. And it was well worth reading; thank you for sharing this poem with me, your reader. Though love poems do not come natural for me, you speak honest from your heart. I like the variation of fonts to separate stanzas, but I'd increase the second stanza by one more for people who may have trouble reading curly fonts. The theme is golden, one of the better love poems I've ever read as most people have really... crappy love poems.

To the poem: The poem starts out good with descriptive words: "fragrance of cinnamon bark," "Over your sway arcs." But as it compels forward, I sense a lack of flow mainly in the middle section of this poem, but you still pull this off with not only descriptiveness but also depth. Your depth is fathomable. You take the reader into the mind of the writer and back out with a clear understanding and a mouth desiring more. I love the illustration of you using the architecture and down on the third line of that stanza, show "make" in reference to architecture. Love is so sweet; but it can also be painful. I wish this could have been lengthened by maybe two stanzas to describe the "perfect us" you leave off of in the last stanza, probably because you ran out of the limited number of fonts on writerscafe.org, lol. Kudos. 9.8/10.

And thank you.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

A wonderful piece that really creates such a fun, pleasant, and romantic mood. The different fonts really add to the piece, A very enjoyable read.

Posted 14 Years Ago


liked this alot the different fonts add alot to this nice touch.... overall a very passionate piece... imagery was great in this... pic adds alot to this... nice job my friend..

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is quite simply phenomenal. The rhyme scheme gives it the most enchanting mood. I found myself sighing at your gripping imagery and the perfect weaving of words. Words can't even express how amazing I think this poem is. Thank you so much for the impressive read.
The color I saw when I read this was dark blue.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Excel ant It is a great thing to evoke emotion of another

Posted 14 Years Ago


great poem! I really enjoyed it! and i loved the picture 2 as well. :) great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Some really great parts here Craig. The fonts definitily worked it looks great actually. Nice love poem from a different angle. Well done.:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


That's so beautiful.

Posted 14 Years Ago


how can u write such beautiful work? :) You are sooo full of love

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is such an enchanting write, Craig. The way you have painted your love is simply breathtaking. I did particularly enjoy the lines,
"Watch your lil wiggles
I love to dance to you…"

"I don’t wanna miss
A single kiss"
They just felt so real.
Another unbelievable piece of writing, from the master.

Posted 14 Years Ago


LOL on the different fonts! You certainly are a creature of great depth with such colorful thoughts! Nice read!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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