I want to linger...

Random streams of thought on us...

 

Fragrance of cinnamon bark

Over your swaying arcs

That dress slipping seamless…

I listen to your truffle giggles

Watch your lil wiggles

I love to dance to you…

On your skin, rhymes and verse

Freckles unrehearsed

Love reading your poetry…

Your soft midnight lips

The swaying curve of your hips

Saying hello to mine…

I want to linger

Wrapped ‘round your finger

No place I’d rather be…

You are sung

On my untamed tongue

Your name tastes like summer…

I don’t wanna miss

A single kiss

Or the scent of you in my dreams…

The architecture of you

Your form and style construe

We make the perfect us…

Author's Note

My thoughts tend to have different fonts… :)

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Craig Froman,

I normally do not read things unless I am urged to read something whether it be through email or read request, but I finally gave into all of those small status updates about you having this as your featured poem. And it was well worth reading; thank you for sharing this poem with me, your reader. Though love poems do not come natural for me, you speak honest from your heart. I like the variation of fonts to separate stanzas, but I'd increase the second stanza by one more for people who may have trouble reading curly fonts. The theme is golden, one of the better love poems I've ever read as most people have really... crappy love poems.

To the poem: The poem starts out good with descriptive words: "fragrance of cinnamon bark," "Over your sway arcs." But as it compels forward, I sense a lack of flow mainly in the middle section of this poem, but you still pull this off with not only descriptiveness but also depth. Your depth is fathomable. You take the reader into the mind of the writer and back out with a clear understanding and a mouth desiring more. I love the illustration of you using the architecture and down on the third line of that stanza, show "make" in reference to architecture. Love is so sweet; but it can also be painful. I wish this could have been lengthened by maybe two stanzas to describe the "perfect us" you leave off of in the last stanza, probably because you ran out of the limited number of fonts on writerscafe.org, lol. Kudos. 9.8/10.

And thank you.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

["...N8..."]

wow, that was great! I've never been in many situations that you write about in your poems before, but you make it seem natural. cant wait to read more.

[Stacey Watts]

Very beautiful piece. It is truly amazing and very well written. Words of rich romance.

[Sarah]

WHAAT THIS IS AMAZING! Beautiful, flowing use of language, and the use of different fonts (which I usually find distracting) worked really well here. ^^ The rhyming & meter were flawless, really great. :) So yeah, I pretty much adored this. X)

[Ladysue]

Such beauty and admiration. Wow, a gorgeous piece of writing. Very well done...

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

This is amazing!
It's beautifully put together and it has such an amazing focus.
You ended it perfectly; "We make the perfect us…"
Absolutely fantastic!
-Elissa :)

[Helen Crutchett]

"Thoughts have different fonts" hahahaa, I loved that! I just wonder what my fonts would be??? lol

"I listen to your truffle giggles
Watch your lil wiggles
I love to dance to you…"

"Your soft midnight lips
The swaying curve of your hips
Saying hello to mine…"

Look I'm going to end up quoting the whole poem if I'm not careful....so I'll leave it at that, except to say this was SENSATIONAL!!!! Bravo poet!

Helena

[Regann Lain]

Really adorable poem. The emotion was pure and the imagery was heart warming.

[Poet's World]

the imagery used in this poem is really good and it keeps the readers mind focused on the poem, the way the lines are composed and the smooth flow of the poem makes it "worth the time spent reading the poem"... overall its a good write!

[BirdsFly]

I love that this poem touches each of the readers sense. Cinammon scent, truffle taste, the sound of giggles and saying hello. You paint a very definite picture and the reader can feel the love between you and the object of this poem. The imagery is fantastic.

And, of course, the subject just warms my heart. I love people in love.