IMMERSED

 

I want to immerse

myself in you
mesh together
hand-to-hand
heart-with-heart.

Memorize you

every dream

every freckle

every curve

every joy.

Absorbed.

Bathed.

Covered with us.

Saturated and

melting together

where each raindrop

is a recollection

of your smile

as the drops slither

slide down

slip over glass

gliding

like fingers

over your skin.

In the wind

I hear the echoes

of your voice

and feel your

soft caress.

So I gaze

glare

survey

stare

into your eyes

into your thoughts

into your mystery.

As snowflakes now
float and fall like
ashen butterflies

and blanket earth
may we blend

into one

becoming

completely

IMMERSED…

 

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

You are brilliant, dear poet. The notion of being completely 'immersed' into the one who holds our heart is elevating and oh, so passionate.

'Memorize you/every dream/every freckle/every curve/...'

I'm smiling and thinking, for truly fortunate is the gal who wins your heart. So very exceptional, my friend.

[Abd-afeez]

The effect is just so great slid down, gliding, oh! What were you thinking about? You already got me there. I mean to rate this as so excellent. Even if the poem stops their. I won't stop thinking you've made it look so good. I will add this to my library.

[Sheila Kline]

Your ability to totally captivate your readers is astounding! As you move from word to word, building line by line, we are sent gliding across your talent like an Olympic Gold skater skims across the ice!
This is just exquisite, and lucky shall be the woman who becomes/ or is the focus of such exceptional devotion!!

[cest la vie]

What a divine read..
Immerse yourself.. such a deeply, soulful way of loving.. Your words literally glide from the page to the readers own heart..

I have to say this is my favorite poem of yours (as of today-tomorrow you may blow this one away)
really a beautiful piece..

[Lilly]

Ah - so passionate and beautiful as always! I really love the whole thing though my favourite lines are:
"where each raindrop
is a recollection
of your smile"

and

"As snowflakes now
float and fall like
ashen butterflies
and blanket earth"

Amazing...

[Kayla]

This poem is amazing!! The way you described things was just incredible!! You are an awesome poet!! And this is an awesome poem!! (Thanks for reading and reviewing "Summer Beauty"

[Samuel Dickens]

I think it's very special when one person can experience another in this way, but when it's mutual, that has to be something near enlightenment. I think my first wife and I may have approached such closeness. (40 years ago)

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful poem, loving, passionate .. your words are like touches, strokes .. you have the knack of taking your readers into another world, one we'd like to share - if we'd not seem like intruders .. there's such sincerity and devotion .. the desire to immerse .. the desire to walk hand-in-hand, heart-to-heart ..

.. beautiful .. as always.

[Sean M. Addams]

very romantic and full of passion ... i thought you did a great job on this piece the imagery in this is very stunning... overall i thought you did a great job on this a very brillant write!

[Aimee Mahathy]

Holy wow. This is so amazing! It's so smooth and delicate much like those soft caresses described here. Your words are so sincere and heartfelt... like they dripped from your heart itself.
Amazing!

[J.P. Bristow]

yes indeed you have a lyrical soul and can write your way into any girls heart---- the font however is my only complaint for an otherwise dreamy write.