Sapphire blue

 

 

You are a pool so sapphire blue

Refreshing water, fresh and new

Your eyes, a deeply crystal hue…

 

In your azure beauty I’m undone

Your smile is like the rising sun

A sheltering current just begun…

 

Let my enchanted life begin

Let me come and drown within

Your soft and sacred skin...

 

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations on winning the Short Poem #3 Contest!

[Tammy]

Another great write.

[Kaotic Barbie]

Beautiful.

[Cardinal Robin]

I don't know about anyone else here but if I ever had a greeting card with this printed in it I'd think I was in Heaven. I love how much passion it holds in such a simple arrangement. Makes me think of the Nestea ads where the people plunge into that cool blue pool, only here on a much more personal and grand scale!
"come and drown within your soft and sacred skin" is Casanova territory! SWEET!

[just is]

This is so wonderful and ever so soft and beautiful, well written

[Wildfleour]

Great ending (which is really just the beginning)!!!! :)

[Michael Carr]

Ireally likedthis craig. it's quite beatiful. and i must give you mad props for creating a rhyming poem that totally doesn't suck a*s. crude humor out of the way, the piece is poignant and sweet, with some really stunning imagery. the first lines are some of the best poetry I've read in a while.

great work man!

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

I loved the rhyme scheme in this. I've been meaning to write a poem in this form, and I'm in awe of yours. The comparison of this person to a sapphire blue pool is beautiful and breath-taking. Great job with this!

[Frank Terino]

Very well written and expressed, I'm sure this captured the woamn's heart is was intended for.
beautifully done in all subtlety. Keep up the great work.