You make poison taste like wine�

Oh, those toxic relationships!

 

 

You make poison taste like wine;

Make dying a breathtaking time.

 

Suffocating beauty draped in white

Drowning in your childlike light.

 

Feed me cakes with sugared shards;

Bury me alive in your crimson yard.

 

Your toxic skin is soft and warm;

In burning screams I fall deformed.

 

Stab me, shoot me; I don’t care…

I need your touch, your taste, your stare.

 

You make poison taste like wine...

Reviews

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Ouch! The title is captivating, color and choice of font makes this write even more inviting to read. I was truly drawn into this :
"Feed me cakes with sugared shards;
Bury me alive in your crimson yard." ~ Wonderful lines. This poems speaks of bittersweet love and fatal attraction to the extreme. Nice work.

[Seriana]

Boy am I out of the loop. I thought I reviewed this one already! Craig....
This:
"Stab me, shoot me; I don't care�
I need your touch, your taste, your stare."
Is the perfect line! I love it.
You know what I'd love to see? I'd love to see you step out of your comfort zone of rhyming and try free verse a bit more. I bet you could conjure up some wicked writing!
Nice job, brother bear! :)

[Miss Suicide]

This is..intense.

I especially loved the part where you said: "Your toxic skin is soft and warm;

In burning screams I fall deformed."

That was killer. In all, I loved the way you described this adoration for someone who was not good for you, this was an excellent write.

The font definitely helped add meaning.

[JohnL]

Oh Yes, There are such people. Walking paradoxes - bitter-sweet, love-hate, "free me but don't untie me." Problem people - but none of this sums them up as your poem does, and on top of all this, you find a font that says it all again and print it all in a colour that brings to mind a 1959 Medoc (mmmm!) then I find it's corked!

[Kaitlyn]

It's amazing how you can get so attatched to someone who's not good for you. I love every part of this poem. It's flow is amazing and the words you use to describe everything are amazing. I love this one!

[Adela Muresan]

Great poem, but I really think that you should change the last verse to something that you haven't written before in the poem...something kowel and witty.
Anywayz great illustration of passion and addiction.

A.M.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow what a breath takingly write!!! All love is bitter sweet & you capture that well here!!

[Ingie the Blue]

This is really great. It gives the effect that light for one person is dark from someone else..irresistable darkness

[Wildfleour]

Oh, I really like this one! Excellente! :)

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

I agree with others. This was a beautiful poem. I loved the line "You make poison taste like wine." You present a platonic relationship beautifully. Great job with this!