Like raindrops...

A poem in honour of a dear friend far away...

 

 

My days race like raindrops down a window

Mingling and merging, like liquid lovers…

Where do they go when they fall so fast?

I can’t seem to gather them up again…

Slipping over my skin; through my fingertips

Clinging for a moment before falling to earth.

Come back to me… Come let me taste your wine.

Let me dance in your memory; smile in your song.

Or help me remember it will rain again another day

And I will once more feel your presence on my skin.

My days race like raindrops down a window...

Reviews

[Ru Banerjee]

Craig, this is such a touchy and sensitive write, I absolutely LOVED every line...absolutely adored the mingling and merging raindrops in your poem, the imagery of the 'liquid lovers' who cling 'for a moment before falling to earth'...I willingly admit that if I ever attempt to write again, your effortless play with imagery will always serve as a big inspiration for me, and I would crave for acquiring even half the poetic intensity and maturity that I find in reading your works nowadays. YOU ARE THE BEST!
Ru.

[Tracie Skarbo]

This is a great write, and congrats on winning. I love the smell, and the music of the rain. This is a delightful celebration for your friend, no doubt they will love it.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on you great winning poem!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning raindrops contest!

[Kit-Kat]

lovely write. Thanks for entering my contest

[Marisa!(:]

Very good, "Let me dance in your memory; smile in your song." would have to be my favorite line. You have talent.(:

[Stephanie]

"Let me dance in your memory; smile in your song."
That is beautiful and poetic brilliance! I really liked this because I love rain, and the title enticed me. And of course, the actual piece astounded me with it's depth as yours always do. Amazing work!

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Divine.. another great one.. you have such a way with the elements of that which is around us ... bringing each element to life and filling it with love.. you have taken rain and turned it into lovers that slip mingle and slip through fingers.. falling fast.. you then compare your own days to those same speedy raindrops.. felt like a yearning for someone to come back to feel their presence... a high rated lover.. to feel their presence on your skin again.. or this could be spring fever!!! Love the part:

Mingling and merging, like liquid lovers�

Anyone who has watched rain flowing over a window will admire this line.. thank you so much for sharing!!! =)

[Wildfleour]

Liquid lovliness! :)

[-Aurelia Mirella]

Oh my dear...you had me in a trance with the very first line.

So much love with every line...it's just bello!

Well done brother, well done.

Always,
-Aurelia ♥