Intoxicating...

Oh, you are...

 

 

I took a drink of your olive eyes,

And staggered at your gaze.

I nibbled on your soft lips;

Cream over crimson, so sweet.

We danced in your delicate fragrance;

I couldn’t stop from spinning.

Breathless, my ears drank in your voice

And angels paused to hear you speak.

I take another drink of your olive eyes.

You are so very intoxicating...

 

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Lust pouring throughout each line.. reaching the highest peaks of all 5 senses. Felt like the start of a "hopeful" love perhaps? Very nice, delicate flow.. with olive eyes being the profound focus of the intoxication. Awesome writing.

[Jessica M.]

Ha I like the underlying reference to alcohol through the poem.
This really is a beautiful write.

[Gheeneil]

A story of someone who is under spell, I suppose. This is a lovely write. Keep it up!

[just is]

So full of love, I like this it's sincere and warm, very well written enjoyed this.

[poet2angels (lynda)]

This is gorgeous

Beautiful once again with flawless imagery and flow

Lynda

[Wildfleour]

Ahhhh.....you are so sensual and sweet. Anyone would be lucky to be the object of your affection.

[Canadian Peach]

and angels paused to hear you speak....*soft sigh*!!

What a lovely ballad .... I love your imagery with olive eyes...it instantly brought my thoughts to actual olives, as in a martini...which is complimentary to the drunkeness she seduces in you.

Perfect.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

You very well describe the feeling of getting drunk off of someone you love!!
This is a very beautiful piece!!! :)

[justjenn_2u]

The all-natural high, more fulfilling than any man made substance.

To be able to look into anothers eyes and feel the flame, worth more than any man's best possession.

This is a beautiful poem sure to touch her heart.