Lavender lullaby�

To a friend who has bled�

 

 

A smiling blade once kissed your skin

Bleeding ruby emotions from within

For pain inside could not be carried

One would bleed or soon be buried

Yet your life holds a silver sunrise

In the deep recesses of your eyes

And hope is fire and shades of light

In the darkest corners of your night

So I sing you now this living sigh

May you rest in this lavender lullaby...

Reviews

[DrumMajorPod]

I love this poem! Great work. I enjoyed your addition of various colors throughout the poem. "Ruby emotions." "Silver sunrise" (I love that line!). "Hope is fire" (that's yellow/golden/orange/red). And you bring in "light" and "darkness" too! Black and white. Or shades of gray? Oooo. And, of course, the "lavender lullaby."

This is an excellent work! You use the universality of colors to convey feelings and such. Great work! I am impressed.

[The Dark Priest]

I like your rhyme pattern here. It's very well put.

[Adela Muresan]

What a good way of presenting emotional pain like physical pain.
The idea that our inner beauty never fades away, is expressed beautifully trough images of natural landscapes.

You got a very lovely and enjoyable piece here !

A.M.

[Gema]

OH MY GOD! i love this the way you've place things together and expressed it is so diffrent i love it! how u represent things VERY WELL WRITTEN X

[Natalie]

This is so sweet, so enlightening.

"And hope is fire and shades of light

In the darkest corners of your night"

I love the structure of this poem, especial in those lines~

[Sarah]

Wow, this was such a beautiful and sensual experience to read. =) I love your use of rhyme, it worked very well with this piece & didn't sound awkward at all! I absolutely adored the lines "And hope is fire and shades of light / In the darkest corners of your night" Absolutely breath-taking. o= Great job!

[xlynne]

oh my god! that was amazing! i've said it like a million times but your imagery is astoundingly brilliant! you make evry sentence so rich and visual! i loved loved this!!!!!

[Kelly Scheppers]

Not often do I get chills here, in California...but I did reading this!

Do me a favor...let me know the name of this font you used. Thanks much!

Take care!

; )

[Periac]

hey man absolutly loved it....great feeling

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Beautiful, sensitive and full of emotion. I love the title also. The placement of words is phenomemal as is the use of colors in expression.I hope your friend only bled, but did not die. This is sad enough without the added trauma. Just praise for this, it runs along the lines of the great poets such as Keats and Browning...that is the hghest complient I can pay you. Kudos for a breathtaking effort.
Cheers,
Helen :-)))

[Alicia Isabella Lane]

Just beautiful, I love the correspondence between colors, the imagery of it all is simply lovely. Very nice write, well done!!!