Freedom’s fable

From An Owl on the Moon, July

I open my eyes...

 

     The turquoise and topaz heat engulfs me and convulses my lungs. I stride toward the sea and pause to rest in its cooling embrace.   Wind and waves stroke my hair and face as I listen to the rhythmic drummer.

 

Freedom’s fable clasps and binds,

the beating wings of noble minds.

A vibrant color is deeply stained,

while darkly painted hues remain.

Grip firm your freedom in your hand,

and watch it slither as the sand.

Now grieve in muted liberty

 pain’s fortune-told captivity.

 

     I sit on the sand and wonder, waiting for the waves to crest.

Reviews

[θεά]

You have a way with words, especially around the marine habitat. Your ability to transport the reader into a milieu that is salty and oceanic is enviable and your dexterity in weaving in pathos and anguish is admirable. Love the way you've juxtaposed the notion of clutching at sands of time with the loss of freedom without rendering it hackneyed or banal.

Pithy and poetic.

Just the way you intended it, I suppose.

Best,
M.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words lift me and fill me with thankfulness, and your presence here is so deeply appreciated. Yes, my soul finds life and peace in the sea, every wild wave. May you find a deep peace in these days ahead.

[Rye]

A vibrant color is deeply stained, while darkly painted hues remain.

Wow! I am intrigued by this write, this is so very good. I am enjoying your write.

[barleygirl]

Born on independence day, freedom has always been a big deal to me. So I was drawn to your title especially, since you're basically calling out the idea of freedom as a farce. And it is. Despite all the vivid imagery in your poem representing freedom, there will always be all the hidden things that bind us. I like how this one is mostly poem with good rhyme & rhythm (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[An owl on the moon]

Smiling in the joy of your independence day birth. What a glorious day to celebrate your life. And yes, the world needs to experience the depth and beauty of true freedom. It is glorious. (((HUGS)))

[Moonie]

I think "turquoise and topaz" is a brilliant way to make the reader imagine the hot desert, with the pure turquoise blue sky, and the neverending stretch of sand. Wonderful use of words, as always!

[An owl on the moon]

Ah, thank you so much, Moon's fairest daughter.. I always appreciate your insights. :)

[Neville]

You certainly do have a way with words my friend, yes indeed.... Neville

[An owl on the moon]

Neville, thank you so much for your kind words and friendship here.

[Neville]

always a pleasure my friend.... N

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, what beautiful words. I love the way the following made me feel “The turquoise and topaz heat engulfs me and convulses my lungs” to me there’s something very energizing about that sentence, the ocean is an enticing beauty and the scene of many a epic journey. This story feels epic. Great read. Many mahalo.

[An owl on the moon]

Aloha! Thank you so much for the joy of your kindness here. The ocean inspired this journey, and inspires me still. And though many years since I've been to Maui, I still carry my Hawaiian dictionary. ʻO ka lā e loaʻa iāʻoe ka hauʻoli.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words and thoughts. I wanted to know and read more. Could be a epic journey dear friend. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[An owl on the moon]

My friend, your words always bring me such peace. Thank you. The Pacific Ocean inspired this whole series. I know you know her well.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this one and you are welcome my friend.

[Mrudula Rani]

" Freedom's fable clasps and binds, the beating wings of noble minds". your profoundly true statement has examples; Mahatma Gandhi and Neison Mandela.., Reading your wonderful writings is a treat, Dear Craig.
Oi querido, como que está? Desculpe para ter ficado calado um pouco. Estava muito ocupado, fazendo preparação para viagem de mês que vem. Espero que tudo está ótimo com você. Uma abraço grande. Uma bom fim de semana para você.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words encourage me so deeply, dear poet. Muito obrigado. Estou bem. Como você está? Sua falta foi sentida; sentiram sua falta. Espero que tudo esteja indo bem para sua jornada. Um grande abraço. Tenha um fim de semana maravilhoso, amiga precioso.

[Mrudula Rani]

Muito Obrigada meu querido amigo, para suas palavras carinhosas. Eu estou bem, vou viajar em Augusto .tudo de bom para você. Uma grande abraço.

[Mrudula Rani]

Sua profile image e lindo. Gostei muito. Finalmente eu conheci lindo escritor!

[An owl on the moon]

Você é tão gentil e encorajador sempre, poeta maravilhosa! Muito grato por te conhecer! Obrigado! Um grande abraço!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

My breath is taken away every time I read the beautiful thoughts of your soulful creativity.Your darkness mimics my own and I am bound to your light in this poetic friendship. I always find myself wondering what beauty you will next bring to wonderland. Namaste dear keeper.

[An owl on the moon]

It is always a joy to have your presence here. You understand my darkness so well. Thank you. Namaste, precious poet.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very very nice sir. The tranquility described in your verse is intoxicating to the soul.

[An owl on the moon]

Thank you so much my friend. I could use a cold bottle of tranquility right now... :)