I found myself envisioning angels wounded in Celestial battle, one lying on the earth, his fallen brother at his side.
I found myself envisioning a man of intensity and passion wanting to feel life again after the death of his immortal beloved.
I envisioned a man in a crisis of faith or fortune or love.
Utterly beautiful.
And I am reminded of the leonard Cohen song "Anthem"
"Ring the bells that still can ring
Forget your perfect offering
There is a crack in everything
That's how the light gets in."
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
What beautifully extravagant thoughts. Thank you so very much, dear poet! These words are more than .. read moreWhat beautifully extravagant thoughts. Thank you so very much, dear poet! These words are more than me, and more than time will tell. Praying every day for this fracture to be healed.
There’s a crack in the universe
A fracture in the fabric of time
And a hole in the strawberry sky
So magniff, Love these words. Such a wonderful imagery within your words as well.
Very nicely written, you've talent.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I so deeply appreciate your encouraging thoughts. Wanting your week to be so inspired. The fracture .. read moreI so deeply appreciate your encouraging thoughts. Wanting your week to be so inspired. The fracture will be healed one day.
This is so beautiful and sad. I think this could be adapted to song lyrics. Maybe sometime we can collaborate. I could write guitar chords and sing melody for something like this and send you the recording to make suggestions on.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
What a beautiful thought! Thank you! And yes, this flows from a dark world in me. The healing is com.. read moreWhat a beautiful thought! Thank you! And yes, this flows from a dark world in me. The healing is coming.
8 Years Ago
Yes the healing comes but slowly, as long as you seek it. It is best to listen to your inner self, a.. read moreYes the healing comes but slowly, as long as you seek it. It is best to listen to your inner self, and inner child, and find the authentic part of you that knows what path you should follow.
If you follow what others think you "should do" it tends to misdirect you and lead you away from healing.
Blessings.
Annie
Beautiful! The photo really lends a color to your words or maybe your words highlight the colors of the photo...? Either way, you created an ethereal experience.
You know I have to at least ask you to consider alternatives to "that bed"... 😏. The options are many...
Not to say this is the best advice, but I have found it very helpful in creating more powerful lines in u own work. Trying to never use the word "that" was one of the best writing tips I was ever given. IMO.
Try it, you might like it.
Be well.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
David, thank you again for your review, and for your desire to see us all improve our writings, our .. read moreDavid, thank you again for your review, and for your desire to see us all improve our writings, our word skills. Much appreciated! :)
8 Years Ago
I hesitated at all because you are a far better poet than I... I just felt this "tip" was a good on.. read moreI hesitated at all because you are a far better poet than I... I just felt this "tip" was a good one so I shared... Glad I did not offend.
2024 is here... May we make it so much more heaven than hell... Wishing all peace on earth... Together, maybe we go the distance...
The night has a thousand eyes,
And the day but one;
Yet t.. more..