In copious clouds of lathered foam

A surreal poem from a poetic challenge...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

In copious clouds of lathered foam

Palatial cities blindly stare

At crenellated battled walls

The vestibule of earth and stone…

 

Influential once on brittle pages

The paraphernalia of broken days

Philanderers stripped the beds of lace

In rooms of baroque-colored dreams…

 

Here the rain is my restorative space

Reduced by my minimalist grasp

Unheroic stains of crimson drapes

I elaborate inauthentic fragments of memory...

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

A surrealistic magic carpet ride! Memories are not always authentic, but they are a perception....our perception...of events past. That can't be bad, can it? :) I liked this a lot. Lydi**

[An owl on the moon]

So very true, Lydi! I love looking back at the past through my perceptions... Thank you for coming by! :)

[Sorry Infamous]

Very good job at painting a surreal picture. As always I like most of your imagery but I think I can pick out one the stands out the most.
"In rooms of baroque-colored dreams…" Like dreams within dreams. This was a very interesting trip. The only thing I could think of to help with the surrealism is to maybe play around with the format of the words to create something that isn't so visually linear but that might even take away from your beautiful poem.

[An owl on the moon]

I always have loved your visits to my world.. thank you so much for both your encouragement and for your perfect suggestion. Will see what I can do! :)

[s y e]

Your poem is so visual. Everything I have read so far has taken me on a little 'trip' as I have read it. Which is why I'm a fan of your writings. I actually cannot pick out a favorite line because that would be unfair as I loved them ALL! Well done, Craig!

[Horizon K.]

A beautiful vision & very surreal, like wandering in a dream of fantastical castles in clouds...I elaborate inauthentic fragments of memory...dreams that feel real, and if you can grasp the edges of them and remember....

[Hayley]

I think the major strong point of everything I have ever read from you (and much enjoyed) is your smooth style. It seems so effortless!

[Pax]

"I elaborate inauthentic fragments of memory..."
very dreamy and quite surreal...
wonderful work my friend.

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

A long walk down dank chambers of crumbling tapestry covered walls. Footsteps echo in silent long forgotten chambers. Places where once life was lived and perhaps love existed.

Never more. Gone. Empty. Emotions made unimportant by time.

Impressions gleaned while reading. A lonely piece one walks through quite alone. Alone at the beginning and the end.

[I, Rene]

I love the surrealism of this piece, it's beauty is floating dreamlike, swinging in memories and serene reflection of days gone by.

[Jimi Brady]

Brilliant, my friend. Glad to see you're still writing.

[Ashly Christen]

that picture is awesome
I love the first line
hooks me right away,
actually I just love the whole thing
"here is rain is my restorative space" love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!