Lingering on the edge

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lingering on the edge of light

on silver-shining sequined streets

footsteps fainting, falling night      

grafted gardens of colored pleats…

Rhythmic rifts of clouding skies

cadence tripping light the tune

lullen mists waltz olive eyes

I dance her earth and she my moon…

And in the tranquil ruby glimmer

rain descends in mothered pearls

she glides across the earthen shimmer

in seabird songs and lilting curls…

Reviews

[Valentine]

Nature and the female of the moment..nice one Craig..Katihe

[Sid]

Wow this great, such a beautifully worded short piece...great work!! I really like this!

[JiDonnelly]

wow, This is truly amazing!
such a magical short piece, I loved it!
neat neat work Craig!

-JiDonnelly'

[Mark]

Craig, there is just something about the way you can dissect the briefest moment, and re-manifest it in gentle musical verse that I have not seen the equal of, here, or much anywhere. Your lilting rhymes, your subtle alliterations: I just want to heave a deep, deep sigh, during and especially after reading you. Masterful, as always.

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Words spun like magic. Very enchanting!

[That1Nerd23]

This is most wonderful! Excellent piece! With every beautiful word, I danced along the path of your rhythm! Absolutely lovely! (:

[Lovely Lady]

Your poetry is always my favorite! See you again soon. ~♥~
Lovely~

[lost girl]

your poetry is outta this world! ....I dance her earth and she my moon...exquisite!

[Belle]

I was counting the syllables in every line to have the number of the measured flow but what i found is complexities in the count. So I tried reading it aloud to hear my own voice rising and falling and by doing it I encountered the effect of the syncopation. You effectively organized the words and established a basic timing for emphasis. Very well constructed. I enjoyed it a lot!

[Natasha]

the font slightly distracted me when reading

the poem flowed really well and the descriptive words were great- i especially liked ruby glimmer and earthen shimmer- great words that all go together.