Empty Soul
A Poem by AaronFreitas
Originally a song I wrote way back Feb 10, 2008, changed a couple things so I could share. It was written about a specific moment in my life where things weren't good.
Nothing's ever perfect
Nothing's ever fair
I look into these eyes
And see this blank stare
Frayed since my creation
Abandoned from the start
My mother never loved my dad
And it breaks my f*****g heart!
Made to disappoint
Destined to fail
Created for your laughter
Only I could never tell
I am so pathetic
It’s so sad to see
I am just a worthless liar
but that’s what you made of me
That’s why you did it
That’s why you left me empty
Torn between my family
And it’s not sad for you to see
Why me? Why me?
What did I do to deserve this empty destiny?
Why me? Why me?
Take my empty soul and leave me free to be
You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul
© 2016 AaronFreitas
Author's Note
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Wow....I'd share a song to answer this, but it's not on English, and i couldn't translate yet. . so ....
i can relate to this, all too well. (except for being a liar.)
but, take a quick note, we're all here for you :)
you're not worthless.
:)
you're one of a kind. no one could even think about asking for a better friend :)
i loved the write
full rating
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
www.writerscafe.org/writing/Danny15/1700613/ play tha song while reading :)
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8 Years Ago
And you're welcome.
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8 Years Ago
Awesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my co.. read moreAwesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my couch next to me I wanted to start playing haha... I appreciate your feedback buddy :)
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Ashley :) I like to write about the experiences I've been through... good or bad. I'm gl.. read moreThank you Ashley :) I like to write about the experiences I've been through... good or bad. I'm glad you found the meaning in my words :) Appreciate your review
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1 of 2 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Willard :) Like I mentioned this one was from 08 yet it relates perfectly to the way thin.. read moreThank you Willard :) Like I mentioned this one was from 08 yet it relates perfectly to the way things have been this past year. I appreciate your review my friend :)
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8 Years Ago
Enjoy you work.
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8 Years Ago
I appreciate that :) You preparing for El Nino? Looks like we are getting the rain we asked for :)
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8 Years Ago
Sorry but no. I hope it happens, but from last I heard we are at least 2 weeks out before we see any.. read moreSorry but no. I hope it happens, but from last I heard we are at least 2 weeks out before we see anything like rain. Couple of sprinkles maybe next Monday and Tuesday. Keep the dream alive my friend. Hopefully all the rain and flooding around us will refill some of the aquifer
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8 Years Ago
We definitely need it... I just worry about some of the smaller farm towns flooding as we've seen be.. read moreWe definitely need it... I just worry about some of the smaller farm towns flooding as we've seen before.
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8 Years Ago
We are at 139% of snow pack today, which to me is a waste since the final check in spring is the one.. read moreWe are at 139% of snow pack today, which to me is a waste since the final check in spring is the one that matters. They said we need to be at 150% this year. so far, so good.
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8 Years Ago
That's a positive... I'm going to have to take my daughters up to the snow soon!
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8 Years Ago
This week is ugly with the holiday traffic, but a nice sled day would make your at least "SuperDad" .. read moreThis week is ugly with the holiday traffic, but a nice sled day would make your at least "SuperDad" for a day.
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8 Years Ago
Yeah... they get an extra week off of school before they go back... that may be the time to take the.. read moreYeah... they get an extra week off of school before they go back... that may be the time to take them!
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for your amazing review KWP :) What you said makes perfect sense. I am much more loving .. read moreThank you for your amazing review KWP :) What you said makes perfect sense. I am much more loving to my kids than my mom and step dad were to me. Rather than them believing they aren't loved I want to make sure they know they are. I appreciate your words my friend :) Thank you
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8 Years Ago
funny how we ourselves get a chance to learn and have the opportunity to pass it on :) Yo have kids .. read morefunny how we ourselves get a chance to learn and have the opportunity to pass it on :) Yo have kids - that's funny too - i did not ever imagine you with kids ;) too young I thought X
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8 Years Ago
haha... well KWP I am going to take that as a compliment lol.... I have 4 daughters :)
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8 Years Ago
OmgAwd 4 daughters - man you must be surrounded by love and yes by all means it's a compliment!!! Ho.. read moreOmgAwd 4 daughters - man you must be surrounded by love and yes by all means it's a compliment!!! How old is the eldest? I am opposite to you - I have two sons X
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8 Years Ago
Oldest is 10 youngest is 3 :)
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8 Years Ago
It was definitely a unique experience growing up. Some of those feelings of being torn between my f.. read moreIt was definitely a unique experience growing up. Some of those feelings of being torn between my family came directly from living with my mom then moving out at 16 to go live with my dad. I remember my mom didn't really talk to me til I moved away to college and just the pain and emotional roller coaster those two years really took a lot of out me. I am stronger and I try to share those feelings. It's easy to find those feelings and share... the hope is that people that need to read it find it... people in need of relating to someone thats lived through some rough times. Appreciate your review buddy :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you DeadSoul :) I read through this one and found it ironic how back in 2008 and now 2015 I'v.. read moreThank you DeadSoul :) I read through this one and found it ironic how back in 2008 and now 2015 I've felt a lot of the same feelings. To read my own words and see how I expressed me in two different phases of life was kind of neat. I am glad you enjoyed it my friend :)
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8 Years Ago
I understand what you mean
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Added on December 30, 2015
Last Updated on February 2, 2016
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I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..
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