Empty Soul

Empty Soul

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Originally a song I wrote way back Feb 10, 2008, changed a couple things so I could share. It was written about a specific moment in my life where things weren't good.

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Nothing's ever perfect
Nothing's ever fair
I look into these eyes
And see this blank stare

Frayed since my creation
Abandoned from the start
My mother never loved my dad
And it breaks my f*****g heart!

Made to disappoint
Destined to fail
Created for your laughter
Only I could never tell

I am so pathetic
It’s so sad to see
I am just a worthless liar
but that’s what you made of me

That’s why you did it
That’s why you left me empty
Torn between my family
And it’s not sad for you to see

Why me? Why me?
What did I do to deserve this empty destiny?
Why me? Why me?
Take my empty soul and leave me free to be

You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul

 

© 2016 AaronFreitas


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Wow....I'd share a song to answer this, but it's not on English, and i couldn't translate yet. . so ....

i can relate to this, all too well. (except for being a liar.)

but, take a quick note, we're all here for you :)
you're not worthless.
:)
you're one of a kind. no one could even think about asking for a better friend :)

i loved the write
full rating

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

And you're welcome.
AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Awesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my co.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

hehehe : )



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I can honestly relate to this. You've really captured the feeling in this great poem! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you :) I'm glad you can relate and understand where I was coming from :)
Lovely poem my friend, makes me glad i stopped by :) It's been a while. Hope you are well and have a lovely beginning of the year :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you Ana... I'm glad you stopped by too :) I hope all is well for you :) Happy 2016... hope t.. read more
Hey Aaron, I'm please to read that this happened back in 08.
A touching write about our dark moments in life. We all go
Through it, and learn from it's experience. Still cool, thanks
E G.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thanks E.G. :) Darkness comes and goes... wish it would stay away :)
I really liked that first stanza!!
Keep up the great work!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you Emily :)
This poem is so powerful. I'm sure it was a beautiful song, and I'm glad you've shared it here. Your third stanza really struck a chord with me. This piece is relatable and real; the honesty you've displayed here is raw and beautiful. Thank you for this poem. It's wonderful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

That third stanza is a tough one for me... that's the way I felt for a long time. Sometimes it stil.. read more
At this moment in my life I can relate to this on a personal level. I have never felt so worthless and alone. Thank you so much for sharing... it is a beautiful song, one I am sure I would listen to for hours if it were instrumentalized.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

I'm glad these words reached you... sometimes we hit spots during life that are hard to get through .. read more
Obscured by the Shadows

8 Years Ago

Thanks for the advice :D
Amazing!
It has a sad and haunting tone and the questions are worth pondering over

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Yes indeed my friend. Thanks for your review I appreciate it :)
You've expressed your agony with such intensity, the emotions are overwhelming! Well done, indeed! :)
I look into these eyes
And see this blank stare
I loved these lines. They're perfect! They describe the condition of depression so well. :)

Made to disappoint
Destined to fail
Created for your laughter
Only I could never tell
I am so pathetic
Low self confidence is a phenomenon everyone has known at one point or the other. Very, very well expressed.

You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul
These lines just say it all. They took my heart away.
A fabulous write. Keep up the good work. Only, don't be so depressed. I sincerely hope you don't feel like this now. May God bless u n help you realise your worth. Amen. :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your awesome review Bushra :) I really appreciate it buddy :)
Jesus Aaron,this piece is rather intense....I hope the outcome will be a little brighter for you my dear friend,good piece overall however It left me with a slight bit of rage and i need time to reflect..Ill get back to you on this...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

haha why rage micky? It is i little intense my friend... you know I always appreciate your time my .. read more
sad aaron ! i guess our parents have a lot to do on how we turn out,they don`t realize
the effects they have on our lives..but we must overcome and see it as it is.
they was just living out there lives in front of us not knowing the effect they have..
now you know and you wont do it to your children...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

They definitely do... and for some it works out. My parents were never together which wasn't the ha.. read more
 wordman

8 Years Ago

my pleasure

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