Empty Soul
A Poem by AaronFreitas
Originally a song I wrote way back Feb 10, 2008, changed a couple things so I could share. It was written about a specific moment in my life where things weren't good.
Nothing's ever perfect
Nothing's ever fair
I look into these eyes
And see this blank stare
Frayed since my creation
Abandoned from the start
My mother never loved my dad
And it breaks my f*****g heart!
Made to disappoint
Destined to fail
Created for your laughter
Only I could never tell
I am so pathetic
It’s so sad to see
I am just a worthless liar
but that’s what you made of me
That’s why you did it
That’s why you left me empty
Torn between my family
And it’s not sad for you to see
Why me? Why me?
What did I do to deserve this empty destiny?
Why me? Why me?
Take my empty soul and leave me free to be
You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul
© 2016 AaronFreitas
Author's Note
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Wow....I'd share a song to answer this, but it's not on English, and i couldn't translate yet. . so ....
i can relate to this, all too well. (except for being a liar.)
but, take a quick note, we're all here for you :)
you're not worthless.
:)
you're one of a kind. no one could even think about asking for a better friend :)
i loved the write
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Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
www.writerscafe.org/writing/Danny15/1700613/ play tha song while reading :)
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8 Years Ago
And you're welcome.
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8 Years Ago
Awesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my co.. read moreAwesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my couch next to me I wanted to start playing haha... I appreciate your feedback buddy :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much Pushkar :) Glad you enjoyed it buddy! Always appreciate your reviews and suppo.. read moreThank you very much Pushkar :) Glad you enjoyed it buddy! Always appreciate your reviews and support :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Michael :) Appreciate your comments buddy
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much Shielah :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Scarlett :) It's definitely dark but it gets the message across.... appreciate your revie.. read moreThank you Scarlett :) It's definitely dark but it gets the message across.... appreciate your review
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Gloria. Your reviews always bring a smile out of me :) This one is an older write but st.. read moreThank you Gloria. Your reviews always bring a smile out of me :) This one is an older write but still at a dark time. It just came back around to fit my life in the past year. I really want to be able to play my acoustic guitar and sing this... just at home though haha. Always appreciate your reviews :)
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8 Years Ago
:) I'm glad to hear that!
Isn't it interesting reading old pieces from a past moment and see.. read more:) I'm glad to hear that!
Isn't it interesting reading old pieces from a past moment and seeing how it somehow still relates in a different way to what's going on currently? I've had a few pieces do that for me. Do it! That'll be awesome, even at home, it's still brave! :) can't wait to check out your other works... I've been meaning to during the weekends when I'm not brewing.
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8 Years Ago
It definitely is interesting... there are some pieces that I read and wonder where my mind was when .. read moreIt definitely is interesting... there are some pieces that I read and wonder where my mind was when I wrote it. It's nice though to look back and see how far you've come in life. I actually think I have chords down to do it. Been playing it a little the last couple nights when I'm home alone bored haha. I appreciate your checking out my other pieces... it's actually been a while since I've written anything so hopefully it will happen soon :)
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8 Years Ago
Well good vibes to you then! Hope you get a stroke of inspiration. That awesome, that you got a coup.. read moreWell good vibes to you then! Hope you get a stroke of inspiration. That awesome, that you got a couple chords down :) good luck with that.
I agree too, always a positive to see where you came from and realizing as bad you thought it was then...it brought out more good stuff.
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8 Years Ago
Definitely... thanks always my friend :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
I hear ya Vanessa :) This is another one of my old pieces. I haven't actually sat down and written.. read moreI hear ya Vanessa :) This is another one of my old pieces. I haven't actually sat down and written or shared in quite sometime :( Maybe it's time to start searching my mind again and see if I can impress you :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Sami.... written to be a song about 8 years ago. Performed back in the day but I have no .. read moreThank you Sami.... written to be a song about 8 years ago. Performed back in the day but I have no idea how it was played on guitar so trying to do it on my own. Funny how we can look back and read words from the past and how they come full circle in life :) Thanks for your review buddy
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8 Years Ago
Wow. You are welcome. ...:))))
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Your words mean a lot Angelique :) I appreciate your comments and glad you liked it :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Riley :) I'm still trying to work on guitar to try and put this into a song.
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8 Years Ago
Yes! That would be amazing!
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thanks for the review Samparkk... which poem of yours?
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Added on December 30, 2015
Last Updated on February 2, 2016
Tags: dark
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I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..
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