Empty Soul
A Poem by AaronFreitas
Originally a song I wrote way back Feb 10, 2008, changed a couple things so I could share. It was written about a specific moment in my life where things weren't good.
Nothing's ever perfect
Nothing's ever fair
I look into these eyes
And see this blank stare
Frayed since my creation
Abandoned from the start
My mother never loved my dad
And it breaks my f*****g heart!
Made to disappoint
Destined to fail
Created for your laughter
Only I could never tell
I am so pathetic
It’s so sad to see
I am just a worthless liar
but that’s what you made of me
That’s why you did it
That’s why you left me empty
Torn between my family
And it’s not sad for you to see
Why me? Why me?
What did I do to deserve this empty destiny?
Why me? Why me?
Take my empty soul and leave me free to be
You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul
© 2016 AaronFreitas
Author's Note
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Wow....I'd share a song to answer this, but it's not on English, and i couldn't translate yet. . so ....
i can relate to this, all too well. (except for being a liar.)
but, take a quick note, we're all here for you :)
you're not worthless.
:)
you're one of a kind. no one could even think about asking for a better friend :)
i loved the write
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Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
www.writerscafe.org/writing/Danny15/1700613/ play tha song while reading :)
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8 Years Ago
And you're welcome.
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8 Years Ago
Awesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my co.. read moreAwesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my couch next to me I wanted to start playing haha... I appreciate your feedback buddy :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much lynn :) It's definitely a write full of raw emotions... appreciate your review .. read moreThank you very much lynn :) It's definitely a write full of raw emotions... appreciate your review :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thanks buddy for the review :) Glad you liked it :)
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Fate... those are deep lines to me... almost have it finished to play it on guitar :)
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8 Years Ago
I'd love to hear them sir ;)
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8 Years Ago
haha maybe someday :)
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8 Years Ago
it would be great :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Anytime haha.... thanks for taking time to read and review. Most my writes come from some kind of e.. read moreAnytime haha.... thanks for taking time to read and review. Most my writes come from some kind of emotion I've felt and the feelings I write with (for most) are real. It sucks that you can relate... but I am here anytime you want or need someone to talk to :)
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8 Years Ago
Haha. Thx ...
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much Emily :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you my friend... much appreciated :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Insight :) I agree with you my friend :) Appreciate your review
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much Terrance :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much Jessalynn :) It's a piece that I enjoy and now I can play guitar and sing this .. read moreThank you very much Jessalynn :) It's a piece that I enjoy and now I can play guitar and sing this one. Finally got it down the way I want. I appreciate your review :)
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8 Years Ago
Nice that's awesome. I've seen people link songs or videos to their poems you should defiantly do th.. read moreNice that's awesome. I've seen people link songs or videos to their poems you should defiantly do that :)
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8 Years Ago
Haha I may have to try it :)
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much Aly :) I definitely will... feel free to send me rr's for your favorite writes .. read moreThank you very much Aly :) I definitely will... feel free to send me rr's for your favorite writes and I'll check em out. :)
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Added on December 30, 2015
Last Updated on February 2, 2016
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I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..
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