Just a feeling

The taste of your skin 

explodes 

passion into my heart.  

 

The touch of your body

launches 

my mind into a fanatical eruption.  

 

Indescribable 

is the sensation 

of being with you, 

knowing

only a miracle from God himself

can guide you to me

as if it was destiny.  

 

I feel as if I’m walking through heaven

and you’re behind a half open door… 

teasing me 

with the angel I am missing out on. 

 

Unlike any emotion I have ever felt before,

Your inner beauty 

brings me to my knees, 

begging God please, 

to let me explore 

a world of ecstasy with you- 

who brings upon me

an epiphany of the reality of my destiny;

just guide you to me. 

 

I do not want to go on living 

this way, 

knowing that I could

fill your heart

with love for eternity.

And even though you have love,

I find you here

with me.

On my mind

in my heart 

I’m attached emotionally.  

 

What am I to do

with this feeling 

I have no control of?  

Should I 

fade

before your eyes; 

leave you to be?

 

Or should I take this chance

and trust that you will see……

Author's Note

This is a piece I wrote in December of 08... wish I remembered who it was about!
Edited to a format which I like much better than the free write I had. Thanks to Jan aka JayceeC :)

Reviews

[Writer_next_door]

This was really good, and full of true emotion, not just words. You wrote in a way that allows the reader to experience the feeling the speaker is experiencing as well, and that is a quality not many writers have, but all need so desperately.
Wonderful job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review and the compliments Anne :) I appreciate it very much :)

[ExquisiteEyes]

Full of pure and sincere emotions. It has a smooth flow. I hope the person for whom this was written, can read it.

[AaronFreitas]

I doubt she ever did... I don't even remember who inspired the write :) Thanks for your review :)

[E G TEN]

Hey Aaron, it has to be for a someone special, with angels and
Heaven gates and all, the teasing part was just an added bonus.:-)
You just wrote this as is and let it shape on its own. Well done,
Very cool Man, Thanks for the Add'

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy I appreciate your review :) It must have been pretty awesome for me to write this haha

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Whoever it was, she's lucky you know :) amazing piece my friend :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy... yeah just wish I could remember who lol :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Her name will hit you soon enough :) lol

[andrew mitchell]

A lovely write full of emotion! Did God ever get back to you on this?

[AaronFreitas]

He did... I think He was mistaken though and I got the wrong one! lol Thanks for your review buddy

[Amber Lily]

I love reading things like this because it's not a poem or a story, it's just pure emotion running off the page, going wherever it wants. This type of writing has no rules. It's like trying to catch water with your hands, it spills and splashes right out.
These thoughts are so sweet and I enjoyed the detail. Emotions of love are very hard to describe and I think you did a great job here :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Amber :) These are always my favorite for the reasons you say. It's just raw emotion pouring out rather than formatting or anything else it's just what you're feeling. I am glad you liked it :)

[zunie frost]

well... the work are perfectly chosen !!!!
smooth flow !!!!
i like it..... really beautiful and emotional !!!!
really natural feeling of love !!!!
100& ratings from me

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you so much Zunie :) I appreciate your kind words and rating :)

[zunie frost]

it's my pleasure !!!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Well, this is a big change of mood from your other writing. It is very beautiful, I really liked it, it made me smile. 100 points for this piece, it has a nice feeling of love.

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah it's definitely a different side which is why I wanted to share it. I guess it is true that we can really channel what we feel. At some point I felt this and was able to explain it.. it's a little harder right now haha... thank you!

[MissLaine]

AWWW such love pours through the page! heh, this is so beautiful! :)
Wonderfully written! I love it.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you MissLaine :) Worst part about it is I can't remember why or who made me feel this way haha... I just started going through my old writes and I was like hmmm I like it I'm going to share lol :)

[MissLaine]

LOL :) i see~ Awww. its okay. I bet she was one lucky girl > u < hehee~ :D
Awesome job still!

[AaronFreitas]

That's the thing I can't remember how special she was lol :) Time to replace her lol