Just a feeling

The taste of your skin 

explodes 

passion into my heart.  

 

The touch of your body

launches 

my mind into a fanatical eruption.  

 

Indescribable 

is the sensation 

of being with you, 

knowing

only a miracle from God himself

can guide you to me

as if it was destiny.  

 

I feel as if I’m walking through heaven

and you’re behind a half open door… 

teasing me 

with the angel I am missing out on. 

 

Unlike any emotion I have ever felt before,

Your inner beauty 

brings me to my knees, 

begging God please, 

to let me explore 

a world of ecstasy with you- 

who brings upon me

an epiphany of the reality of my destiny;

just guide you to me. 

 

I do not want to go on living 

this way, 

knowing that I could

fill your heart

with love for eternity.

And even though you have love,

I find you here

with me.

On my mind

in my heart 

I’m attached emotionally.  

 

What am I to do

with this feeling 

I have no control of?  

Should I 

fade

before your eyes; 

leave you to be?

 

Or should I take this chance

and trust that you will see……

Author's Note

This is a piece I wrote in December of 08... wish I remembered who it was about!
Edited to a format which I like much better than the free write I had. Thanks to Jan aka JayceeC :)

Reviews

[Writer_next_door]

This was really good, and full of true emotion, not just words. You wrote in a way that allows the reader to experience the feeling the speaker is experiencing as well, and that is a quality not many writers have, but all need so desperately.
Wonderful job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review and the compliments Anne :) I appreciate it very much :)

[Brittany Bostic]

This is a very detailed yet very nicely written description of passion without love. The facts and the truth that intertwine into each other in this piece of poetry.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Brittany :) It's a little bit of a different write from what I've been writing lately. It kind of shows a different side that has been missing for a while but thanks for your review... I appreciate it :)

[Alias]

beautiful imagery and interesting use of religious imagery to convey love as a deeply spiritual experience - nicely done!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Alias :) This is an older piece... a little different for me but I wanted to share something since I found all my old writings :)

[Perkele.7885]

Aaron, The best part of this poem, other than the fact that it is beautiful and can stand alone on that fact by itself, is the fact that it is not the dark, disabling ventures that you take me on so often. Lets return Aaron to that Aaron, that silver tongued Aaron of yester-year and smile to smile, celebrate a new poet.

[AaronFreitas]

There isn't a hint of darkness in this one :) Appreciate your review buddy :)

[Isabel]

Feelings can be complicated sometimes. Interesting write, keep it up!

[AaronFreitas]

They definitely can be Maria... sometimes we care about and feel for someone and we never truly know what they feel. But... maybe that's what fuels such powerful feelings for them. Thanks for your review :)

[lostnstars]

I'm in love with the last lines leaving the readers a question if you should go with it or keep your feelings to yourself. I think a lot of people will relate to this which is really good. I also love your choice of words it's written beautifully. Please keep on writing, you're amazing :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :) I appreciate your kind words... I hope I find that feeling again someday :D

[Beth Lindsay]

It's a beatiful poem. I remember a time that I had similar thoughts to it. Keep up the good work.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Linzi :) Yeah those thoughts have faded... still don't remember who I wrote this for but she had some kind of affect on me. Hopefully I'll experience that again some day :)

[prachi prangya agasti]

Emotions sustained in some wonderful lines, loved it.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... I'm glad you loved it :)

[Dead]

This is beautifully tragic.... :) I love it!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Lost Rose :) Appreciate your kind words

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This is so smooth and untainted. I love this because its raw yet totally has a polished quality that only you can give. Great Job

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Crystal :) I get what you're saying... I like raw writes they are my favorite... the most personal. Appreciate your review :)

[Aayushi]

Wow, this is a beautiful piece, emotions and passion all flowing deep in your words. Good work my friend.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Aayushi :)