Just a feeling

The taste of your skin 

explodes 

passion into my heart.  

 

The touch of your body

launches 

my mind into a fanatical eruption.  

 

Indescribable 

is the sensation 

of being with you, 

knowing

only a miracle from God himself

can guide you to me

as if it was destiny.  

 

I feel as if I’m walking through heaven

and you’re behind a half open door… 

teasing me 

with the angel I am missing out on. 

 

Unlike any emotion I have ever felt before,

Your inner beauty 

brings me to my knees, 

begging God please, 

to let me explore 

a world of ecstasy with you- 

who brings upon me

an epiphany of the reality of my destiny;

just guide you to me. 

 

I do not want to go on living 

this way, 

knowing that I could

fill your heart

with love for eternity.

And even though you have love,

I find you here

with me.

On my mind

in my heart 

I’m attached emotionally.  

 

What am I to do

with this feeling 

I have no control of?  

Should I 

fade

before your eyes; 

leave you to be?

 

Or should I take this chance

and trust that you will see……

Author's Note

This is a piece I wrote in December of 08... wish I remembered who it was about!
Edited to a format which I like much better than the free write I had. Thanks to Jan aka JayceeC :)

Reviews

[Writer_next_door]

This was really good, and full of true emotion, not just words. You wrote in a way that allows the reader to experience the feeling the speaker is experiencing as well, and that is a quality not many writers have, but all need so desperately.
Wonderful job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review and the compliments Anne :) I appreciate it very much :)

[Riddhi]

Great work....
I liked the way you carved your feelings in this poem...
Eager to read your next writing...
Keep on writing..
Thanks for sharing...
Riddhi

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend for your reviews :) I haven't been on hardly at all but I owe you big time :)

[Nisreen]

Aaron this is stunning
the most romantic piece i have come across
this longing is just pure bliss

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you RiverSided :) I would love to write more romantic pieces but unfortunately I haven't been writing at all! Hopefully soon... appreciate your review :)

[Terrence Chang]

The passion of love and lust burning in the readers eye. Well written Arron

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Terrance :)

[CiNtsaLis]

This is...."DEEP" *catches breath* AMAZING can not describe how beautiful this piece is. Full ratings.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much CiNtsaLis :) I definitely appreciate your kind words and rating :)

[CiNtsaLis]

You're most welcomed (:

[Cherub]

I absolutely love the feeling of love and passion I get from this! always loving your poetry Aaron, and it seems that you've been a great writer for a while. Keep up the good work.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Kuma :) I want to focus more on pieces like this so we will see :) Haven't seen you in a while it's nice to see ya on here

[Cherub]

Yeah, havent written in a while, been kinda in a slump but back now and hopefully gonna post more frequently!

[AaronFreitas]

I hope so... if so send me RR's :) I'm super behind but hopefully I'll come back more :)

[Connie]

wow, this is incredible, I really love it!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Connie... it's a different type of write for me but I'm hoping to channel some of these romantic feelings some more :)

[Bluefire]

Lol maybe it was about someone you saw in your dreams, or someone you meet in the future.
So full of passion, though! So well written! I seriously thought of such an amazing woman.
Thanks for sharing!

[AaronFreitas]

It is definitely possible :) I appreciate your kind words Bluefire :) Thank you!

[Bluefire]

You're welcome

[Pryde Foltz]

Passionate and enveloping. A great romantic write. Aaron:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Pryde... a different side of me :)

[Irenic]

A very beautiful poem. like it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you irenic :) It's been a long time since I've see you on here :)

[Irenic]

welcome and yeah I have visited on it after a long time :) thank you :)