Cry for Help

Here is something I wrote about 8 years ago... originally written to be a song back in the day but made a few adjustments to share.

Nothing but my shadow staring back at me

I walk alone down these empty streets

A child nearby asks for change

To buy his fix, what a f*****g shame

 

Down the street… a w***e for sale

Searching for love, you couldn’t tell

Sex for crack is her way of life

Life’s clock is ticking waiting for her to die

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

A thieving bum worn to his destined domicile

Begs for forgiveness, yet lives in denial

No room for him in our over populated jails

He’s left to slowly descend into hell

 

A mother walks this forlorn street

Disappointed and crumbled in defeat

And even though she tries to hide her pain

You hear her cries bleed out in vain

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

Destructive behavior that will never be fixed

To these evil streets you are affixed

You take everything for granted like you do

What would you do if it happened to you?

Author's Note

Please share your thoughts :)

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

It's a great write, about something we either change, or better get.used to it.
Since not everyone wants to do anything, other than point fingers, and wait for someone else to do something... I don't know what to do. let's not forget, that nothing, and no one forced these people to do what they do. (other than the prostitutes).
Whatever they go through, is just a simple consequence of their choices, and actions. Though i think we would need to help them. But then again, you, or i cannot do much on our own.

[AaronFreitas]

You make a good point... in all honesty without a boatload of money the only things we really can do is volunteer or raise awareness. It comes down to money when thinking of really wanting to make a change in someones life. I know for a distant relative... he was on the streets with a major drug problem. Homeless by consequences of choices he made. It took his family going to pick him up, financially and emotionally supporting him and getting him help that got him back on the right path. Took quite a bit of energy and time from several people just to help one. It's hard to really spark a mass change and it does suck for most of these people, once they are in this dark spot in life there isn't a way out. Appreciate your awesome review.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

you're welcome. :)

[nupur chauhan]

nicely described ... i really appreciate ur artpiece .... thumps up

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you nupur :) I appreciate your review

[nupur chauhan]

ur most welcome sir

[Pryde Foltz]

We do not know what to do with our suffering and we do not know how to let go of our desires when they cause suffering. When we learn these two things … when they are taught to every child, suffering will evaporate:) Powerful write:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Pride.... you make some great points :) Appreciate your feedback :)

[Not here]

this was a very deep and touching poem. i thought it was awesome :) keep it up

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy... appreciate your feedback :)

[Emily]

Very nice poem!
Keep it up!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Emily :)

[Angelique]

Very insightful poem. A thing to remember though is no one forced them to do what they do and a person can only help them if they would like to get out of that situation they are in if they don't want any help then unfortunately no one will be able to help them no matter how much a person would like to. It is sad that people will do that for money, but the thing is though everyone will do anything in order to survive.

[AaronFreitas]

You make a good point in saying no one forced them to do what they did. Usually it's mistakes or bad choices that have landed them in this position then it becomes survival. Appreciate your review Angelique :)

[Angelique]

Very true and it is a pleasure

[Blue]

I remember walking in streets watching people like them live their lives. It's a depressing picture. I hope they'll make right choices next time. My heart bleeds for them.

[AaronFreitas]

It is a sad sight to see Blue... and for some they would rather be there than anywhere else even if they had a choice. Thanks for your review :)

[MissLaine]

Dang.. this like calls for such roars and such. Very heartfelt and such pain..
The world is harsh.. and sometimes not everyone sees it. There's so many problems out there in the world besides hunger.. So much abuse and wars.. The world will never be at peace if no one will solve the problem. But it takes more than one to solve anything.. Too much evil exists. It's saddening.

Thank you so much for this write! Very open and emotional...
Well done!

[AaronFreitas]

You are right when you say too much evil exists! I always appreciate your reviews my favorite erotica writer :)

[MissLaine]

mmhm! AWWWW ;) hehee. I'll always review your works :)

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks you are too awesome :)

[MissLaine]

;) hehee You are also awesome! ^U^

[AaronFreitas]

Haha you're making me blush over here ;) lol

[MissLaine]

D'awwww aww, so cute you are! hehee! :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Poignant and intense!
Your words depicted so many vivid pictures and each can be woven into a whole new story by itself.
Nice imagery!
I enjoyed it.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for your words Jyoti :) I found a bunch of my old writings and songs and I liked this one so I decided to share it :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thanks for sharing. :)

[Bear]

I can see where this would be interesting lyrics in more than one genre, the only thing I see wrong is that every line is a stand alone line, they need to be tied together with a defining word. Consider something like this, give it a try and see how it sounds in song :~)
As I walk alone down these empty streets
with nothing but my shadow staring back at me
There's A child nearby asks for change
To buy his next fix, what a f*****g shame

[AaronFreitas]

I understand what you mean and I like your thoughts. I will look at it again in a new light :) Appreciate it buddy :)

[JayceeC]

Great work and thoughts. My only caution is that the opening is very similar to 'Boulevard of Broken Dreams' that said, you immediately takes too a much darker side of town that makes Green Day sound like whiners. It's very harsh but a realistic scene for many poverty stricken neighborhood. It really doesn't have to be the city. Even small towns have the issues, but I hope they are just a bit better at putting a face to this humanity to Lee's a hand. Sadly, many become so disillusioned by those that work the system, they forget there are many who are drowning in an abyss.

[AaronFreitas]

I didn't notice that until I read your comment... hmm...I need to find another way of saying what I mean then. I am going to go out on a limb and say just about every big city, small city and small towns all have an area somewhat like I described. I remember, and maybe this is where these thoughts stemmed from around 8 years ago.... when I was working as a C.O. a female inmate had told me about tent city. It is an area in our downtown where the homeless live. They call it tent city since theres tents everywhere. She had told us about how bad drugs were there. Even mentioned if she gets released she will go right back there and sell herself for crack. That was her cycle of life. Its sad to see but to really feel the words she told me is hard to convey onto paper the same way she left that empty feeling when she told her story. I appreciate your review as always Jan :) If you have any suggestions for that opening line please share :)

[JayceeC]

Nothing but my shadow staring back at me
I chase it down these empty streets

(it's one syllable off, but much the same and may work if you have a tune in your head) I think just flipping the line will be helpful to get it out of that direct pattern.

[AaronFreitas]

You've got a point Jan... I like it :)