Devil in Disguise

It's been so long... hope you guys like it.

I saw you all alone; I could feel your pain

So I tried to help you find your way

You closed your eyes and took my hand

And trusted that happiness wasn’t far ahead

 

For so long we stayed on track

Getting over fears, never looking back

Without ever noticing the simplest change

I saw your smile and could see no more pain

 

Pain has a strange way of going away

But evil is something you can never change

The more I learned the more I pulled away

I didn’t want your demons in my way

 

The damage was done; it was too late

The second I helped you I sealed my fate

Good intentions turned to mistakes

Mistakes that only demons can create

 

You are the evilest of all, devil in disguise

You burned my heart with suicidal cries

I was a fool that you used from the start

And it would be you that ripped life apart

 

Another night I sit alone with my fears

Typing away these words hiding my tears

God give me the strength I need for tonight

Give me the strength to live this life

Reviews

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Reminds me of something I read recently about drowning in good intention. Sometimes best to direct these sort of cases to the professionals. Sure you'll be blessed for your efforts though. Some people are very difficult to help. All that aside, this was a great poem. Story-line, rhyme, rhythm - all perfect. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Some people are difficult to help... and while you think you're helping them they know what their intentions are and how to manipulate things to fall into place for themselves. "drowning in good intention"... I like that analogy :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. So sad and heartbreaking. Tears are the expression of the storms inside. Excellent for sharing....:)......

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Sami... much appreciated buddy :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome buddy.....:)........

[andrew mitchell]

A write of a broken heart in pain and sadness came to mind. A nice expressed write Buddy!:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Andrew... it's nice to write something, it had been so long :)

[Fate]

this is cool.. an awesome write! :)
well, that's life... it doesn't always as good as we want.. sometimes it has that evil..
and it's up to us if we will fight to survive or just leave it there..

[AaronFreitas]

Very true Fate... I am choosing to fight yet acknowledge the work of evil and how it tried to destroy me. Thanks for your review :)

[Fate]

you're very welcome sir :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Oh my gosh! This is such an awesome poem I had to put it in my library. You reminded me of one of my favorite poems of all time named "Eloa" about an angel who falls in love with the devil like you described in the first verses. You did a great job with this piece of writing, the structure and the rhyming make it sound as smooth as a sad lullaby.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Alondra :) I write a lot with rhyming... I don't force it but most my work comes out that way. So when I let the thoughts flow this is pretty much the way it came out. I don't play with it too much and I like to leave it fairly raw. I am glad you like it :)

[connor]

The good thing about poems is that every reader sees something different in it. for me this tells a sad tale of love and betrayal, and the realization of the protagonist of the relationship going sour, using the imagery of demons for all of the bad things happening.

Then again, I could be completely wrong with this hypothesis. No Matter! very thought provoking and very well written. Thanks for sharing it with us.

[AaronFreitas]

You understood it the way I felt it when I wrote it :) I am glad you really understood the meaning of it. Thanks for your review connor.

[silent poet]

Well this escalated quickly! what I first read first few lines I thought ok, LOVE,
then so fast it turned to darkness. Not in a creepy way, just as life does you know. I felt every bit of this. It made me feel for you at that moment. A glance inside if you will. Great words, write and flow within. (Give me the strength to live this life) after a line so real. nothing more can be said. love it Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks silent poet :) You know... when I started writing I let things flow and write what I feel. Yet my style usually remains the same... I look at things many different ways and I remember how innocent everything felt and I remember how it felt when it all turned. I always appreciate your feedback :)

[Satan]

We are our own demons sadly, best to not provoke their wrathful side. But they will always be inside of us ready to pounce when we do wrong. I hope you feel better soon bud.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy... I think we all have the side in us... some just hide it away better than others :)

[FaeryQueen]

i loooooooooooooooooooooooove this work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Khatoon :) Always appreciate your kind words :)

[Philip Muls]

I thought this would be a romantic piece since it started with "You closed your eyes and took my hand
And trusted that happiness wasn’t far ahead."

Very nice turn for the worse. It makes you wonder who you can trust.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Phillip... I was hoping to draw the reader in and really let them know what I felt. How innocent everything was and how it just turned and later come to find out everything the other person had planned went just right for them. Thanks for your review :)

[Amelia May]

Such powerful words and phrases. This piece is extremely well written and I urge you to continue writing more. Very impressive. 100/100

[AaronFreitas]

You made my night Amelia :) Thank you very much for you kind words I really appreciate it :)

[Amelia May]

What of course! I have been absent from this site for many months and am just now able to catch up with all the amazing writing that people like you post. So thank you.

[AaronFreitas]

Well I am glad you made it to my write :)