Devil in Disguise

It's been so long... hope you guys like it.

I saw you all alone; I could feel your pain

So I tried to help you find your way

You closed your eyes and took my hand

And trusted that happiness wasn’t far ahead

 

For so long we stayed on track

Getting over fears, never looking back

Without ever noticing the simplest change

I saw your smile and could see no more pain

 

Pain has a strange way of going away

But evil is something you can never change

The more I learned the more I pulled away

I didn’t want your demons in my way

 

The damage was done; it was too late

The second I helped you I sealed my fate

Good intentions turned to mistakes

Mistakes that only demons can create

 

You are the evilest of all, devil in disguise

You burned my heart with suicidal cries

I was a fool that you used from the start

And it would be you that ripped life apart

 

Another night I sit alone with my fears

Typing away these words hiding my tears

God give me the strength I need for tonight

Give me the strength to live this life

Reviews

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Reminds me of something I read recently about drowning in good intention. Sometimes best to direct these sort of cases to the professionals. Sure you'll be blessed for your efforts though. Some people are very difficult to help. All that aside, this was a great poem. Story-line, rhyme, rhythm - all perfect. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Some people are difficult to help... and while you think you're helping them they know what their intentions are and how to manipulate things to fall into place for themselves. "drowning in good intention"... I like that analogy :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

*HUGS* sorry that happened to you. To be there for someone and then to learn that they're using you, stabbing you in the back. Indeed evil isn't something you can fake for too long no matter how many boy-who-cried-wolf tears you shed.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for your awesome review :) Yeah it did suck but what can you? I just decided to write it out and put it in the past. I appreciate your words Nadia :) Oh love the new pic too :)

[Brittany Bostic]

I have never felt this feeling (at least in actual context of my life) of being betrayed by someone you thought you knew so well. The evil comes through in them and you realize you don't know who they are anymore. I felt as if I were Padmé yelling at Anakin on the Mustafar system.

[AaronFreitas]

You are very lucky Brittany.. it's not a good feeling when you finally let go and trust someone and open your heart only to have it broken and betrayed. It's not a feeling I wish on anyone but a feeling I wanted to share. Thanks for your review :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well, your poetry is just as good as i remembered. as for people who take advantage of your kindness toward them... well better get rid of em before they swallow you whole. give them your little finger today, and they'll tear off your hand tomorrow.

well, when it comes to life...it's all included in the pack...together with the rest...

100 points.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for your awesome feedback! You know I always appreciate your support and I am glad you're back! Send me some rr's :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

you're welcome :)

[Rajat malik]

Nice rhyming, nicely depicted.....it feels like it all happened with me......Like I was the character in that poem. Sometime short- short things can have a great effect in you life. But rightly said by someone: Don't be sad because it's over but Smile because it happened.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Rajat.... at the end of the day all we can do is smile and be thankful for what we do have in life :)

[Rajat malik]

You are right Aaron......this is what Life want from us or maybe we want from Life.

[RomaJ]

Wow, this is heavy. Loving someone like that, is like trying to save someone from drowning, nothing but dead weight in your arms trying to drag you down with them, leaving searing scratch marks all over your arms. Ouch! cuts deep.
Sometimes it's best to just let go of these toxic types. It's hard when it's someone you love, but sometimes that's all you can do is just walk away. Ah, very touching poem. I could feel the pain. It burns...I like it. Well done.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Roma :) It does cut deep... and even though those cuts heal those memories live on forever and it's hard to shake them. I appreciate your review as always :)

[Ruth]

Powerful emotions Aaron...sometimes we have to walk away for nothing more than protecting the heart...

[AaronFreitas]

Yes indeed Poppy... sometimes thats the only choice we have :) Thanks for your review :)

[Mara]

Amazing! I love seeing when you have a new poem because i always know im going to love it
Really great piece here:)

[AaronFreitas]

Awww that means a lot Tee! I appreciate your compliment... you made my night!

[dan]

Aaron, as I read this I could almost imagine sitting in that room while you were tapping this piece onto the keyboard. The way you manage to humanize the tone, drawing the reader in, more intimate. This is incredible writing, young dude. Again, perfect tone! take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

That means so much coming from you Dan! Thank you! I enjoy looking deep down inside at things that have hurt, broken me and just any kind of emotion that I truly felt... then I write about it honestly. Your reviews are always appreciated buddy :)

[Calamityofgin]

Oh darlin..so sorry. But no fool falls in love..a fool stays there when its unwise. Very honest and powerful write Frrrreitas..!

Love and wishes of inkin that hell b***h out!

Xalamity of jen

[AaronFreitas]

haha you always get a lot of honesty in my writes... one day I'm gonna have to try erotica and see if I can impress you at all :) Thanks for your review :)

[JayceeC]

I'm glad you are back to writing with the same open, honest emotion that you always show. Although you use a simple form and language, there is nothing simple about the poem and the feelings you arouse in me as a reader.

On a personal note, sometimes prayers are the only things that get us through the dark period. No matter how evil seems to surround you, keep that candle going. There's a place in you it can never touch.

[AaronFreitas]

The power of prayer can never be underestimated :) Thanks Jan you know I always enjoy your reviews. With my writing... I keep it simple. I like to get my emotions across and hope that others are able to relate to it. I don't get overly creative but I would love to challenge myself more and take more chances to really expand my knowledge. Maybe you can help me out with that... challenge me with something :)