Devil in Disguise

It's been so long... hope you guys like it.

I saw you all alone; I could feel your pain

So I tried to help you find your way

You closed your eyes and took my hand

And trusted that happiness wasn’t far ahead

 

For so long we stayed on track

Getting over fears, never looking back

Without ever noticing the simplest change

I saw your smile and could see no more pain

 

Pain has a strange way of going away

But evil is something you can never change

The more I learned the more I pulled away

I didn’t want your demons in my way

 

The damage was done; it was too late

The second I helped you I sealed my fate

Good intentions turned to mistakes

Mistakes that only demons can create

 

You are the evilest of all, devil in disguise

You burned my heart with suicidal cries

I was a fool that you used from the start

And it would be you that ripped life apart

 

Another night I sit alone with my fears

Typing away these words hiding my tears

God give me the strength I need for tonight

Give me the strength to live this life

Reviews

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Reminds me of something I read recently about drowning in good intention. Sometimes best to direct these sort of cases to the professionals. Sure you'll be blessed for your efforts though. Some people are very difficult to help. All that aside, this was a great poem. Story-line, rhyme, rhythm - all perfect. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Some people are difficult to help... and while you think you're helping them they know what their intentions are and how to manipulate things to fall into place for themselves. "drowning in good intention"... I like that analogy :)

[sinNsincerity]

Dang, that's rough bro!
I liked how it took off positive and then dipped down, but came back to asking God for strength.
Nice touch!

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy... thats kind of how this situation played out. I thought the finish was a good way to honestly tell how I found peace. Thanks for your review :)

[sinNsincerity]

That's great to hear man, enjoy it while it last. The pendulum always swings back and forth...

[Jaspar]

Absolutely love it. The hope the fear the pain. It's all there. It was like looking in the mirror. Visceral.
Great peace.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Jaspar... like looking in the mirror... I am glad you can relate my friend :) Appreciate your review :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Wow. This haunting poem is full of emotions and regret.
Powerful plot. And you justified the title very well for even the reader could feel nothing wrong in the first half and boom comes the devil in disguise.
Heart wrenching. Relationships are like that, sometimes they become your whole world and sometimes they crush you with their weight.

Very well penned!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Jyoti :) I tried my best and I'm really glad you took that away from my words. Thank you for your review I really appreciate it :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You did great!
Very welcome!

[Emily]

My favorite stanzas where the second and the last.
Keep on writing!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Emily :) I sure will my friend :)

[Amber Lily]

People can be very surprising and sometimes it's in the worst of ways. When you don't see something like that coming it just makes it hit harder. This poem is great because it depicts these feeling perfectly. Great work :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Amber... you are exactly right in sometimes you don't see it coming. Thanks for your review :)

[Anna]

I did not expect the ending, despite reading the title. Very well done.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Anna :) I like to keep people guessing what goes on in mind sometimes :)

[E G TEN]

Hey Man, Nice touching Poem!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you E G Ten... it was nice to get something out and shared :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This piece was bewitching and enchanting. The way the words flowed was truly a work of art! One of the things I appreciate about your work if the darker elements you bring to the table, lots of the time i feel these are forced, but with you its just so organic and honest that it almost reads as inspiration in spite of the darker tones. Really incredible work here. Bravo

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Crystal :) I do feel more comfortable with the darker tones... I guess everyone has their comfort zone and with my experiences in life this is where I find peace. Sometimes when I try to write something softer I feel like I am forcing things but with this one it was just honest feelings about something I lived through and the lingering pain that I have to this day. I am glad you enjoyed it :) Thank you for your review

[Insight "MH"]

The imagery in this line is beautiful: "You burned my heart with suicidal cries". You give your all and they take it all till there is nothing left in you to give.

Insight.

[AaronFreitas]

I never really thought of the depth in that line but it does have a deep meaning. I am glad you liked it and pointed that line out. Thanks for your review :)

[Insight "MH"]

You are mostly welcome.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice tale told in the poem.
"The damage was done; it was too late
The second I helped you I sealed my fate
Good intentions turned to mistakes
Mistakes that only demons can create"
When we face the demons. Must be strong. Thank you Aaron for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Coyote... this one is a small piece of my life and one of the many experiences to learn from. Sometimes people take help and good intentions and use it to their advantage. All we can do is learn from it and share it with others. Thanks buddy :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and you are welcome.