Devil in Disguise

It's been so long... hope you guys like it.

I saw you all alone; I could feel your pain

So I tried to help you find your way

You closed your eyes and took my hand

And trusted that happiness wasn’t far ahead

 

For so long we stayed on track

Getting over fears, never looking back

Without ever noticing the simplest change

I saw your smile and could see no more pain

 

Pain has a strange way of going away

But evil is something you can never change

The more I learned the more I pulled away

I didn’t want your demons in my way

 

The damage was done; it was too late

The second I helped you I sealed my fate

Good intentions turned to mistakes

Mistakes that only demons can create

 

You are the evilest of all, devil in disguise

You burned my heart with suicidal cries

I was a fool that you used from the start

And it would be you that ripped life apart

 

Another night I sit alone with my fears

Typing away these words hiding my tears

God give me the strength I need for tonight

Give me the strength to live this life

Reviews

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Reminds me of something I read recently about drowning in good intention. Sometimes best to direct these sort of cases to the professionals. Sure you'll be blessed for your efforts though. Some people are very difficult to help. All that aside, this was a great poem. Story-line, rhyme, rhythm - all perfect. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Some people are difficult to help... and while you think you're helping them they know what their intentions are and how to manipulate things to fall into place for themselves. "drowning in good intention"... I like that analogy :)

[Cassie]

This words here (You are the evilest of all, devil in disguise) are so powerful, I could feel your write all the way to the end and I hope things will get better and that you will write of an angel in disguise. Devils are there and angels are there too

[AaronFreitas]

Yes there are indeed :) Thanks for your awesome review Cassie! I appreciate it very much and I'm glad you enjoyed my words :)

[JMKane117]

Very powerful words. Wonderfully written. I hate running into those kinds of people. They're like an illness that doesn't let go of you. I particularly enjoyed how forward you were and didn't hold back your words in shadow or mystery.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you :) I'm don't mask my feelings or create mystery... I'm typically a straight forward kind of person. I'm glad you enjoyed it... and yes these kind of people kind destroy another. Thanks for your review :)

[B]

The thing is with trying to hold someone's hand
you must be strong
you must recognize she is unwell
so you cant judge her
until she stands up and takes a couple of steps
and she will
it seems like you love her so much
so its worth it

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for your comments Nisreen :) Some things take patience and somethings take a complete break away for your own good. We will see how it goes :) Did you drop the a on your name?

[B]

it was an intial a
My name is nisreen
lol

[AaronFreitas]

Haha now I know :)

[MissLaine]

Wow... such power in your words. Sometimes in our weakest, we do pray and ask for help from God. He is always there if you just believe. :) Amazing write!

[AaronFreitas]

MissLaine... my woman crush Wednesday haha... as soon as I see your pic I remember your first write that I read... that's pretty awesome. In our weakest moments we do look for answers, for hope and a way to find something to grab on to so we can pull ourselves up. The story behind this write really broke me and it's been a long climb back up to happiness... I'm slowly getting there. Thanks for your review :)

[MissLaine]

Awww! Man, you do make me blush by just saying that! I feel honored haha ;)
mmhm. That is true. Awww, I'm sorry it did but I am glad your getting up to happiness. :)
I enjoy reading your works!

[AaronFreitas]

haha I was hoping you felt honored and not like crazy man alert! haha... thanks for the compliment :) I have your newest write opened and I am hoping to read and review tomorrow :)

[MissLaine]

:) mmhm~ Oooh YAY! :) I hope you like it!

[AaronFreitas]

I'm sure I will... I like the way your mind works :)

[MissLaine]

;) ooh hehee~ YAAAAY haha

[Christopher Zuelke]

Powerful, the way it builds. So much meaning grasps the reader's attention! Awe-inspiring to say the least. Can't help but feel that the title sounds a bit familiar... hahaha :)

[AaronFreitas]

haha thanks so much buddy. Once again I knew the topic of the write but I wasn't sure where I was going with it til it was done. Thanks for your review :)

[R Smith]

brilliant poetry my friend, enjoyed the read very much :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Richard :) It's nice to be back and have something to show... I haven't seen any rr from you hope to see some soon buddy :) Thanks for your review

[Daisy]

wow... awesome and speechless.... it is beyond amazing sir... i just don't have words... i loved every part and every word of this poem.... WONDERFUL

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you so much Daisy :) I'm glad you enjoyed it so much :) I try to find the things that I am most passionate about or feel most strongly about then give my honest feelings about it. Thanks for your review :)

[Perkele.7885]

Aaron, nice to read a piece of yours again. Why you always got to go dark on me fella? Anyway, it was a good piece and a strong write. Good to see here my friend.

[AaronFreitas]

haha thanks buddy... dark just tends to be a comfortable style for me. I am able to really take something I've experienced and just write about it... it's probably because of a lot of the music I grew up on and listen to. I appreciate your kind words. It was nice to sit and write since it had been so long.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Mmm.....powerful images......the enemy within.....lurking....hiding......yet always there, just waiting to pounch.....

Haunting poetry......:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... seems like most my work has some kind of darkness or haunting aspect to it :) Appreciate your review

[Bear]

I have heard it said that love is a demon, it posses you and many evil deeds are done in the name of that demon love. Bravo! Great prospective, and thank you for the warning that we all keep an eye out for that demon, love :~)

[AaronFreitas]

Definitely my friend... it completely blinds you to the obvious and even though your loved ones around you see it you would never believe it anyways until the damage is done. Thanks for you review Bear :)