Last Dance

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I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.

Author's Note

Please comment :)

Reviews

[Aries1984]

One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the way it feels right to me and the flow that I'm saying it with. I'm glad you connect with my work and understand what I do... maybe better than I know what and why I do it sometimes :)

[gabrielle]

This makes me wonder what makes us push away the people we love. Bitter sweet.

[AaronFreitas]

True Gabrielle... thanks for your comment :)

[Rajat malik]

Leaving someone isn't that easy Aaron......
This is lovely but sad....Thanks for sharing

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Rajat :) You are right... it isn't easy my friend.

[Sultrysoul]

Wow ... that felt so real. I actually pictured myself in this poem. It is a gift to make something real for the reader. Very very good job. I enjoyed reading this very much.

[AaronFreitas]

Were you my dance partner? If so come back! haha :) I am glad you could relate to it... that always makes it more enjoyable when the words hit home :) Thanks for your review :)

[Sultrysoul]

I'm coming back lol I think there's another song playing.

[Ghazal]

You are a very sensitive guy...what a beautiful poem decribing your inner soul

[AaronFreitas]

haha don't judge me :) lol... yeah I am... thanks for your kind words Ghazal :)

[Ghazal]

:)) ......

[Robert]

Wow! this is a really heart telling piece Aaron. Expressed so well, sad yes but well written...There is always hope and in hope you will discover what you seek.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Robert :) I appreciate your kind words... yes you are right, there is always hope :)

[GreenShoes]

How frustrating. Sounds like the thoughts of someone with a lack of self-confidence. We only accept the love we think we deserve, sort of thing. I can certainly relate to that. Self doubt holds us back from so many wonderful things. As I've gotten older, I've learned to have faith in myself. Live your life, and let people in.

[AaronFreitas]

You make a great point with only accepting the love we feel we deserve. Appreciate your review Karen :)

[Willard Wells]

Love will win out in the end my friend. Just keep dancing and dreaming.

[AaronFreitas]

Well said my friend... thank you :)

[Emily]

I love this one!!
Well done Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Emily :)

[Kajal Sharma]

it was so romantic...i loved it....simple romantic poetry is something that i love the most...

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks Kajal :) I tried to flash my romantic side a little ;) Thanks for your review

[....................]

to have it a let it go...a heartbreaking sentiment, Aaron... sometimes we push away that which is right in front of us...well-done, my friend!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you FT... when I started the write I didn't start it with the intentions of it being about letting that love walk away but somehow it turned into it as it developed. Thanks for the review :)