Last Dance

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I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.

Author's Note

Please comment :)

Reviews

[Aries1984]

One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the way it feels right to me and the flow that I'm saying it with. I'm glad you connect with my work and understand what I do... maybe better than I know what and why I do it sometimes :)

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Wow Aaron, you really painted a picture with this and really guiding me through every feeling in every moment. Awesome job man!! Keep it up, your work is inspiring!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :) Glad I can be an inspiration :)

[Ely]

Even poem's could hurt. But still, I never get weary of this kind of poetry :) Thank you very much for sharing such a magical yet realistic piece of art.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ely... glad you enjoyed it :)

[Rana]

This is quite magical, with all those words building the perfect aura, it's been beautifully executed, sometimes we have these fears we'd rather not consciously think about and then they slip to the back of the mind and they only silently creep into our dreams. Love the poem. Just this tiny note on this line 'As if you're an angel sent from above', it's a wee bit cliche, and you've certainly no lack of creativity. All the same, a charming, lovely piece Aaron, keep writing.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks Rana... yeah I wasn't sure what else to put there for that... any ideas? I appreciate your review and feedback :)

[Rana]

Um, maybe something that goes like, 'In this moment our souls perfectly align // As if we weren't two but one, all intertwined'... Or leave it the way it is if you like it :)

[SCRIBBLER]

I love this piece of poetry. It is well written and constructed. I could go on and on about the wonders of it. But in short. It is one of the best poetry I've read. Its been a long time sine Ive read this type of poem. I've been of for quite a while and this is a great start to my session. Keep inspiring us.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Scribbler... you always give the best reviews my friend... you are too awesome! I appreciate it :)

[SCRIBBLER]

No problem

[Edis Radoncic]

This is very impressive! I am sure that all the girls who are reading this are obsessing over this poem now haha.

[AaronFreitas]

I sure hope so haha... thanks for your kind words Edis :)

[Isabel]

Such a heartfelt write. Keep up the great work!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Maria :) Appreciate your review

[Perkele.7885]

You were pretty aggressive my friend for all this this outlay of pent up emotion to occur in one dance, the last dance of the evening. And then knowing, that she wants you to stay, you turn and walk away. By choice, I might add!
Are you nuts when you are dreaming? Get it from a pretty lady when you can! Then think about it in the morning,
This was a nice write, Aaron! You need to work on your grammar. I could pick pick you apart but, I will not because you poem is so good.

[AaronFreitas]

Please do pick apart... it will help learn :) Thanks for your review buddy :)

[Ruth]

Saddening life can taint our hearts so...how many opportunities do we opt out of through fear...when that fear is often misguided, sigh...heartfelt Aaron...

[AaronFreitas]

Yes indeed my friend... thanks so much for your review :)

[Bear]

Even a dream can be to good to be true. "I pushed away an angel packed with love" I love this line, it clarifies you and your decision to be who you are even at the cost of being heartbroken. Clap, Clap, Clap, encore!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Bear :) I like your point of view on it :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Love, or what we think we call love, can sometimes blind us too. As the saying goes, if something seems too good to be true......then probably it is. On the other hand, when the oyster opens up, and we see inside a beautiful pearl, our hestitation to enjoy and "keep" such beauty is mind-boggling......

I guess love was designed to keep the hearts and minds of poets occupied for as long as they live....:)

Great writing!

[AaronFreitas]

Yes it was designed for that! haha... thanks for the comments my friend... appreciate it :)