Last Dance

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I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Aries1984]

One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the way it feels right to me and the flow that I'm saying it with. I'm glad you connect with my work and understand what I do... maybe better than I know what and why I do it sometimes :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This is filled with hope and longing. Love the wording and picture it paints.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Crystal :) Same day she will arrive and I wont turn her away :)

[Sydney]

I want to put this to music honestly. You are truly a talented writer Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

That would be awesome :) Thank you Sydney for your compliment :)

[MsJewel]

I'm drawn in by the soft romantic feel of your words...so sad that the dream ended with heartbreak...but the poem truly is lovely.

Julie

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Julie... I'm getting a little closer to my romantic side haha... almost there :) Thanks for your feedback :)

[Writergirl]

I love this! You have a way with words. It was a picture perfect read, just like I was seeing it on the screen. Great job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... glad it provided a nice picture for you :) Thanks for your review :)

[Not here]

great poem Aaron. i really liked it

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very Dante... appreciate it buddy :)

[Emily]

Looks can be deceiving. Maybe you were saving yourself from a not-angel! Good write!

[AaronFreitas]

Haha maybe... you know they say the devil can hide in disguise ;) Thanks for your review Emily I appreciate it :)

[Mayank Sharma]

Nice work.It seems your girl had legs like Beyoncé.:P

[AaronFreitas]

How do you know it wasn't Beyonce? haha I can only wish my friend :) Thanks for your comments

[Mayank Sharma]

😂😂

[Norah]

Simply beautiful ...every line of this poem is magical.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Norah :) I'm glad you liked it :)

[R Smith]

It's a great poem Aaron, I guess it's a dream much like ones I had before, great all the way through and then that last silly moment when things go just wrong, annoying ain't it but makes a great read my friend :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Richard... it's those happy dreams you don't want to wake up from haha... appreciate your review :)

[Mitali Shah]

Simply sweet piece Aaron. Anything and every relishing moment on one's dream is worth treasuring

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Mitali :)

[Mitali Shah]

your welcome Aaron :)