Last Dance

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I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Aries1984]

One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the way it feels right to me and the flow that I'm saying it with. I'm glad you connect with my work and understand what I do... maybe better than I know what and why I do it sometimes :)

[Norah]

I really love what you wrote here!
It is a very warm and heartwarming poem, well done xx

[Michele Harman]

very good i wish i could do poetry justice

[Riddhi]

Another great work....You always express your emotions in a beautiful way in your poems..and this is another of that kind....
Keep on writing...

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you riddhi :) I appreciate your compliment :)

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Sometimes you have to be cruel to be kind. I believe we do this to ourselves way too often instead of living in the moment. Your poem depicted a beautiful scene and I was as disappointed as you by the ending. Lovely poem. Just stunning.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Gaurav. I think at different points in our life we react differently to situations and moments. When I wrote this it came out as this romantic, beautiful piece then as I finished it turned out to be this sad ending. I think where I was in life at the time I felt unworthy of someone or something that amazing and thats the route the poem took. Appreciate your review :)

[Jessi]

You are gifted. Your poetry is written in ink from your heart.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Jessi :) Appreciate your compliment my friend :)

[Ms. Twitch]

"My heart is empty - but truthfully,
That means I have more love to give" I LOVE this line and how complex the truth in that statement. Beautiful piece, thank you for sharing! Can't wait to read your other work during my free time :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks :) I like those lines too! It may make no sense to some but if you get it then you know exactly what I mean. Thanks for your compliments :) Feel free to send me read requests anytime :)

[Dawn Dreamer]

Beautiful... and heartbreaking. You're truly talented!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Dawn... appreciate your kind words my friend :)

[zunie frost]

wow !!! this really outstanding !!! love this .... keep it up !!!
90 points

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Zunie :) I tried my best :)

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!!!!

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

"I watch as you gently walk away" is this parting for a temporal time or, rather otherwise? Because I couldn't read anything that transpired wrongly between the two lovers that would prompt an end to that lovely moment as one is allured to imagine about the scenario.

[AaronFreitas]

It wasn't necessarily that something transpired between the two... it was more of his inner battles and how even though this woman seems so perfect and everything is so right... he still lets her go and finds himself alone. :) Thanks for your review Bonaventure :)