Without you

Watching one of my fav shows... wrote some stuff for fun

This is probably a little past due,

but as I keep waiting for time

to heal these wounds… I only find

myself still missing you.

 

I know I was so far from perfect,

No matter how hard I tried…

I could never find happiness... yet it

kills when I see tears in your eyes.

 

I never wanted to hurt you,

Only a chance to love you.

But the harder I tried the 

farther away I pushed you.

 

Maybe I was never good enough.

 

So I found ways to cope and to

be happy momentarily… never

realizing the path of destruction

and heartbreak I would leave behind.

 

Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you.

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

Poignant piece. The pain and loss of relationship; something every human being experiences. Here you have captured its essence. The pleasure and pain, the truth and blame, elegantly written and evenly delivered. A wonderful poem from an excellent poet. Thank you for rr, and sharing your art.

Peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Todd... sorry for the late response haven't been on much buddy.

[Daisy]

such beautiful words...... wonderful and heart warming poem.... great job writing it....

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Daisy :) Glad you enjoyed it :)

[Kajal Sharma]

oh it was so romantic....i loved it ...great title...great matter..! good work

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Kajal :) I didn't really think much to write it... it kind of came out with a few thoughts and wasn't forced. Sometimes those come out the purest :) Thanks for your review!

[Kousika]

"Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you. "

What a touching lines yaar these are.. I am broken..

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks Kousika... those are my favorite lines in the write and I don't really think I absorbed the meaning behind those words until reading them again right now. They do tell a truth of a broken man realizing what is lost. Thanks for the review :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Your idea of fun sent a signal somewhere deep within me. Loved the way it's written and how the whole writing is so relatable. '
Typo in the 3rd stanza last line...
Thanks for sharing. ☺

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for pointing out buddy... I will fix that. Appreciate your review and I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

I certainly did and you are welcome :)

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Beautiful poetry and the ending is awesome....nicely inked!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Jane! I'm trying to get back into the flow of things so hopefully it's a little kick start. Thanks for your kind words :)

[Arjun Singh]

A really nice write....
Perfectly summarises a heartbreak....
Definitely lvd it... :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks Arjun... it was something to get me started writing again. Gotta keep working it's been to far and between. Appreciate the buddy!

[Arjun Singh]

True.... gotta keep working... move on... however hard it is!!

[E G TEN]

Hey Bro, acceptance is always the way, if you had tried
all others, although you Wrote this with your big heart,
There are some things in life that even the strongest of
All the Cardiac can not contain, to eased away is to share it!
And you did quite well in this poem.
Thanks for Sharing and for the requests.
Stay cool"

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy... been a little stagnant not writing much but hopefully this is a little start in the right direction. Thanks for the review buddy!

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Sounds like one of those catch22 situations. Sadness with her or without her. Great poem Aaron. Thanks for sharing.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Gaurav :) It is just like that buddy!

[Rajat malik]

That's so cute......and sad too.......loved it

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Rajat :)

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Aaron I haven't seen you in a while...this is just as simply peasant and open as I remember readom you. I really like your style. Feels like a conversation I'm there listening too :)))

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks Lynn... yeah I have been a little absent. Haven't had as much time but I want to get back to writing more. Hopefully you'll see some more stuff soon :) Appreciate your review :)