Without you

Watching one of my fav shows... wrote some stuff for fun

This is probably a little past due,

but as I keep waiting for time

to heal these wounds… I only find

myself still missing you.

 

I know I was so far from perfect,

No matter how hard I tried…

I could never find happiness... yet it

kills when I see tears in your eyes.

 

I never wanted to hurt you,

Only a chance to love you.

But the harder I tried the 

farther away I pushed you.

 

Maybe I was never good enough.

 

So I found ways to cope and to

be happy momentarily… never

realizing the path of destruction

and heartbreak I would leave behind.

 

Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you.

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

Poignant piece. The pain and loss of relationship; something every human being experiences. Here you have captured its essence. The pleasure and pain, the truth and blame, elegantly written and evenly delivered. A wonderful poem from an excellent poet. Thank you for rr, and sharing your art.

Peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Todd... sorry for the late response haven't been on much buddy.

[Colton Warr]

This is terrifyingly magical, Aaron! Your words cut through the veins, spilling unto the page a collection of heartache and regret. You were able to put together a nice flow allowing the reader to fully relate and understand the picture you were painting. I love this. Just coming out of some serious heartache myself, I could relate to this instantly. I love the last two lines, that was the perfect ending to a perfect poem. Well done, my friend!

[AaronFreitas]

I am glad you could relate Colton... always makes it a better read :) Appreciate your kind words and review buddy :)

[GreenShoes]

Well, I have to say I wasn't expecting much from this poem after reading your description up there, but this is really quite nice poetry.

[AaronFreitas]

haha I would say I see a lot of myself in this character I was watching in my favorite show :) Appreciate your comments :)

[Emily]

Great poem!!
Well done!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Emily :)

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Awesome, the last part I love a lot. It is a feeling thats hard to express but you got it

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... I am glad I got my feeling across in a way that was understandable :)

[Michael Wright]

Great work showing the despair on the negative side of a break up

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Michael... it's always easier to reflect on the past than to see in the moment :)

[Rana]

It's immensely poetic, the words sway to make their way beautifully across the page to the intellect. Though quite tragic, it's somehow also sweet and perhaps warm enough to melt the addressee's heart. Indeed very well-written, this was a pleasure to read Aaron.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Rana :) It's written a little differently than most my writes but more important was what I had to say and get it. I am glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate your review :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
this is truly amazing poem Aaron bro........
brilliant writing......
heartfelt relateable emotions flawlessly flows.....

"What I do know is that I’ll never
be a better “me” without you."

Bravo!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Pushkar :) Always appreciate your feedback bro... glad you enjoyed it :)

[Shea McWilliams]

I love the beauty of this poem, even though it's tragically sad. But sometimes that's where all the beauty is....in sadness. I think that a lot of people probably feel this way and the way that you put it into words is wonderful, Aaron. Fabulous job, of course and keep writing!

PS: I haven't gotten to reading your story yet but I've put it in my reading list so that I remember.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you so much Shea :) Yeah, sometimes there is beauty in the sadness we endure... it helps for me to write about it. Awww thanks on my story... I know it's long and takes a little while... hopefully I made it worth it to read :) Thanks for your review

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Wow. Aaron, this was a beautiful piece. You really made the pain and loneliness you feel, relatable to the reader. Your emotions are quite apparent in the lines and flow through it so beautifully.

It is a really great piece! I hope that you are getting closer and closer everyday, to feeling like you will be able to love again. It truly is the greatest gift anyone can give or receive.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks Nikki :) I've been in a little writing funk... wrote a short story and this and that is about is for the last month. So hoping this one just kind of gets my mind back to being creative and open. Sometimes I shut down and everything goes away including my writing. Hopefully it's back :)

[R Smith]

great poetry Aaron, love lost and regret make such a powerful package and you opened it to great effect, bravo :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Richard :) Appreciate your kind words my friend. I hadn't seen any requests from you had to go to your page make sure you were still here. Hope to see some more work from you soon :)

[R Smith]

Thanks Aaron, I actually just posted about 50 poems together but as that seemed like 50 RRs to send out I figured it was too much and just left them to be found, it was me bringing all my stuff up to date on here in the hope I might now think of something new to write haha, I guess anything's possible my friend :)