Without you

Watching one of my fav shows... wrote some stuff for fun

This is probably a little past due,

but as I keep waiting for time

to heal these wounds… I only find

myself still missing you.

 

I know I was so far from perfect,

No matter how hard I tried…

I could never find happiness... yet it

kills when I see tears in your eyes.

 

I never wanted to hurt you,

Only a chance to love you.

But the harder I tried the 

farther away I pushed you.

 

Maybe I was never good enough.

 

So I found ways to cope and to

be happy momentarily… never

realizing the path of destruction

and heartbreak I would leave behind.

 

Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you.

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

Poignant piece. The pain and loss of relationship; something every human being experiences. Here you have captured its essence. The pleasure and pain, the truth and blame, elegantly written and evenly delivered. A wonderful poem from an excellent poet. Thank you for rr, and sharing your art.

Peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Todd... sorry for the late response haven't been on much buddy.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Great poem! :) This is so sweet and bitter at the same time. It’s a very horrible feeling when think like this.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Alondra :) Yeah it's not a good feeling but hey mine as well share the feeling right? Thanks for your review :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

I've always believed there's no better way of getting it out. ;)

[Brenda Garacci]

This is a very moving poem, Aaron. Heartfelt and sad. I have one called "Without You" as well. Thanks for your review of "Crosswind." Appreciated it!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Brenda... I will have to check yours out :) Thanks for the review :)

[Gabby Nieves]

Isn't it so much to become a much better you and show the other person what they're missing out on? surely though, this world wouldn't be a better place without you, cause nearly 800 people couldn't have read this awesome poem. You're gonna make it through whatever happens, you're talented and you gotta keep on writing :)) sorry if I missed the message here I just say what's on my mind.. kind of my problem

[AaronFreitas]

Nope you got the message perfectly :) Yeah... I feel like when s**t hits the fan and we kind of lose everything we have nothing to do other than look right in the mirror and find out who we really are. I've been in that rut for a while and it feels like I am a much happier person... whoever gets my love is going to be a special woman :) Thanks for your review Gabby :) I am glad to see you it's been a while :)

[Gabby Nieves]

I'm glad to hear that, that's how we all deserve to feel about ourselves. I enjoy reading your work... even if I don't always leave comments.

[AaronFreitas]

Awww thanks...at least now I know you read even if you don't comment :) You know I appreciate you and you always have a friend here :)

[flickering candle]

wow honestly this is exactly how I'm feeling right now. this is a certain place of emotion that many people experience, and somehow you just said it so simply and beautifully in a way many people might pick up a pencil and stuck without a word to write down.

[AaronFreitas]

Aww I am glad I could be some help :) It's taken me quite a while to kind of sort these thoughts and let the dust settle. It's a crazy situation but it is what it is... hopefully we both find that someone that fills our heart with love :) Thanks for your review Catrina :)

[Norah]

Very sensational..what a lovely poem.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Norah... I am glad you liked it :)

[sinNsincerity]

Even though it feel so, there's always hope bro. Just hold on to it and slowly that piece of you that died or faded away will re-emerge with time...
I feel your pain here and for you- there's nothing wrong with feeling such a way, but do know and trust that it'll all work out my dude.

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah I do trust it will work out eventually :) I was just thinking about you... went through a bunch of my read requests didn't see your name so I am glad to see you on here buddy :) Thanks for your review I appreciate it :)

[sinNsincerity]

Yea I decided to take a break for a while. Can't write about anything if I'm not living it...

[AaronFreitas]

Sometimes a break is exactly what we need. I kind of stepped away for a while... peeked in here and there to the point where I had like 400 requests and was overwhelmed. We gotta step away and let our minds find us again and just live :)

[sinNsincerity]

Hell yea, I feel you!

[Gee]

OY,MAN UP!!!! Joking Aaron,sweet,reflective write,so many will relate to this.

[AaronFreitas]

haha thanks Gee... I'm trying! She can always come back lol... appreciate your comments :)

[Gee]

Nae problem young fella

[nazia]

This is the sad part of some relationships. People can be in your heart and mind all the time but not in your life. You expressed that part Bang on.... A lovely write Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Nazia... you make some good points :) Appreciate your reviews always :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

Oh GOSH! This is FANTASTIC. The rhyme and everything is so Perfect and longing for your Love, Oh god you have a great way of describing everything. And the last line just burst my heart into tears. AMAZING WORK!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Dreamer :) I'm so happy to see your review... haven't seen you much on here and I always look forward to your thoughts :) Appreciate you my friend!

[Destiny Dreamer]

You are very very Welcome! Yeah I haven't reviewed much work, because I am awfully busy with new college life ... Lots of study :p :D

[AaronFreitas]

Sweet... that is more important anyways :)

[Lyingwithlions]

What a great piece. The poem as a whole is incrediblely moving. Yet the last two lines really hit home,
and for me, could'nt be more true.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... those were my two favorite lines also... really solidifies what I was trying to get through with my words :) Thanks