Without you

Watching one of my fav shows... wrote some stuff for fun

This is probably a little past due,

but as I keep waiting for time

to heal these wounds… I only find

myself still missing you.

 

I know I was so far from perfect,

No matter how hard I tried…

I could never find happiness... yet it

kills when I see tears in your eyes.

 

I never wanted to hurt you,

Only a chance to love you.

But the harder I tried the 

farther away I pushed you.

 

Maybe I was never good enough.

 

So I found ways to cope and to

be happy momentarily… never

realizing the path of destruction

and heartbreak I would leave behind.

 

Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you.

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

Poignant piece. The pain and loss of relationship; something every human being experiences. Here you have captured its essence. The pleasure and pain, the truth and blame, elegantly written and evenly delivered. A wonderful poem from an excellent poet. Thank you for rr, and sharing your art.

Peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Todd... sorry for the late response haven't been on much buddy.

[TrishArias]

I LOVE THIS!!!! I write very much in this style!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :) I am straight forward and write whats on my mind usually... glad you liked it :)

[Fate]

"I keep waiting for time
to heal these wounds… I only find
myself still missing you."

....those lines are so sad...I can feel it.,
those pain that you keep to yourself..Hoping that everthing will be fine...


"So I found ways to cope and to
be happy momentarily… never
realizing the path of destruction
and heartbreak I would leave behind."


...and with these lines...oh,,that thing..you tried convincing
yourself you'll be fine...though you know way deep down your heart you miss that someone so bad..
that you've cry yourself to sleep just so you could atleast forget that pain...



this one is so sad... I can really feel it in every lines..
reading this makes me wanna cry..
I love your poem..thanks for sharing sir :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for your review Fate :) Glad you enjoyed it :)

[Fate]

you're very welcome :)

[Clara]

Heartbreaking, Aaron.

Your pain and helplessness in this situation, is so tangible.
Hugs to you my friend.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you so much Clara :) I tried to get that pain across with my words and I am glad you felt that.... thanks for the hugs... :)

[Clara]

You're most welcome. :)

[Sami Khalil]

The sphere and influence of love is wide open. Although the past holds so much pain and angst, the present and future hold new promises, fresh starts. Keep your hopes up and learn from the past. Sad but an excellent write on this subject.....:).....

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Sami... appreciate your review buddy :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ......:)............

[SheIsMe]

The last lines are so sweet and sad and filled with emotion. Good job, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend :) I tried to get that raw emotion in there.... always makes it better :)

[dan]

Aaron, This piece so accurately describes the universal feelings of pain and self-disgust when a relationship dissolves. One always blames one's self, and tears a hamstring kicking themselves in the a*s. One will meet another, and though it may be different it can still turn out to be so much better, even though the sameness is absent. Keep your heart open. Open for business. When my wife and I met neither one of us was looking for a partner, both getting over bitter divorces. But love found a way to put us in each other's path. Hope, and love. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for your encouraging words Dan... that is pretty much right where I am at. Going through bitter divorce not looking for anything but optimistic the right person will come along some day. Thank you buddy :)

[D.T.]

Yet another wonderful piece of work I've read from you. I love it and I love your writing. This is certainly one of my favorites.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much D.T. :) Appreciate your compliments :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A sad reflective and 'insightful' piece> How many of us have been there, can relate to this?

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah I assume it's normal to go through that... hopefully not too many times! :)

[Mitali Shah]

Lovely piece Aaron. Pleading to fade away in one's heart is not easy but man you have nailed it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Mitali :) I tried my best :)

[Mitali Shah]

your welcome :) God bless