This is so of a fantasy form of poetry; some of the choice of words depicts mid-darkness and horror. Words like pure-evil, drowning in a pool of blood and death, roasting in hell, are threatening to the poet and knowing such predicaments are sure to come unless he defeated that which need to be fight off, haunts him. Many things are to be drawn from this piece of amazing write-up, but this I've for now. Thanks for sharing.... Bona!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I'm always glad with my work when I read your reviews. I love the way you analyze and really search.. read moreI'm always glad with my work when I read your reviews. I love the way you analyze and really search for the meaning in each write. That means a lot buddy! Thank you
The title for this was perfect and intriguing. The poem had amazing imaginary and feeling filled it. We can find ourselves having evil thought that could rise the demon in us at times of great stress or pain. This is a great piece on that. Thank you for sharing.
Excellent piece Aaron
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Angela :) It was my first piece in a while and I'm hoping to get back to writin.. read moreThank you very much Angela :) It was my first piece in a while and I'm hoping to get back to writing a little more :)
It's great how the first two stanzas are rich in dark imagery while the last two in dark thoughts, creates quite an interesting contrast. Did notice the title being just right, perfect for this. About how you said it you don't even know where it all came from, was reminded of this thing I once read, 'writing is like driving at night in the fog. You can only see as far as your headlights, but you can make the whole trip that way.' Haha, and this short trip of yours Aaron was great. :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much for your awesome review Rana :) When I started it I had no idea where I was goi.. read moreThank you very much for your awesome review Rana :) When I started it I had no idea where I was going with it and it just kind of fed itself the thoughts needed to write it. I am glad you liked it :)
I completely fell right into your first lines, that alone captured me. It's like we know the dark writes of Aaron but to word this the way you have? Speaks volumes.. I immediately felt shadows but at the same time felt ease.. because many hide the depths of anything too dark or out there but you put it out and even with that you find the light.. love this piece. great work friend.. :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you so much :) I always like to read my work out loud as if I'm reading it to people to see h.. read moreThank you so much :) I always like to read my work out loud as if I'm reading it to people to see how it flows and how it works out... the more I read it the more I like it haha... I posted it originally without liking it much but since everyone seems to find something they like out of it it really means a lot :) Hopefully I will get back to writing more :) Appreciate you always!!!!
Well said, daily struggles and perishing should be the routine fate but evolving strengths should be fine permanent foot prints capable of touching future, humans are capable of finding real lights and materialistic mirage
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Linda :) We are all capable of finding the light within the dark... :) I appre.. read moreThank you very much Linda :) We are all capable of finding the light within the dark... :) I appreciate your review very much!
Hey Bro, this write somehow reminds me of Vegeta"
A character from DBZ who is pure evil but manages
To become a Super Saiyan, and eventually sided
On to the forces of Good... we all have that Hulk
Inside us,,that's easy, the hard part is to contain it..
Score one for the Dark Write! Thanks for sharing! :-)
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Very true buddy you got it right... it lurks deep down inside us... some are better at keeping it at.. read moreVery true buddy you got it right... it lurks deep down inside us... some are better at keeping it at bay while some let it rip through :) Appreciate the review buddy!
I think this is very true. Quite interesting, I feel as if I've taken a journey into your mind Aaron. I want to say it's lovely, but that's probably the wrong descriptive term to use for this poem. :) I do love this though. Very thought provoking and realistic. Great job, keep writing!
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
haha I'll accept lovely lol... I am glad you enjoyed it Shea :) Always appreciate your reviews :)
I love the last stanza because it's so true. Our fate has become what can be described more closely to hell than heaven, and the mark we leave behind is the small fight we put up against it before it inevitably takes over. I love this with a passion. Hopefully I got the meaning right! Good job my friend! :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Erin :) You did get the meaning right... so glad you did. Appreciate your revi.. read moreThank you very much Erin :) You did get the meaning right... so glad you did. Appreciate your review my friend... and cute new pic! :)
Aaron, This is so deep and so disarmingly honest. It feels as if you wrote me a letter, and are now awaiting an answer. I know you've spoken to me after reviews telling me how this is how you really feel deep inside but hide it well in your everyday life. I can only tell you that you and I are in the same boat...maybe my situation is different because I have my wife to talk me down from the ledge? Just ride it out, Aaron...you seem to me like a great guy who just has some stuff to sort out. You're a good man, sir...please know that about yourself. take care...dan
Thank you very much for the feedback and your honesty buddy... I appreciate it. Yeah it's a little .. read moreThank you very much for the feedback and your honesty buddy... I appreciate it. Yeah it's a little different not having my ex-wife to pull me back from the ledge but learning how to do so myself now :) Appreciate it buddy
9 Years Ago
Oh, now you're talking about an EX? Please don't get me looking back down THAT road. (shake and shiv.. read moreOh, now you're talking about an EX? Please don't get me looking back down THAT road. (shake and shiver) Whatever is holding you down? Just kick it's a*s! take care...dan
9 Years Ago
haha I am working on kickin a*s Dan... one day at a time :)
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..