Padded Walls

Something different... no not about me :)

Wrap me up... strap me up

Throw away the key

Locked in a room, I lay to spoon

With a shadow of me

      Shut them up!!!

      Tell them to stop!!!

      These voices wont cease!

Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e

Thoughts unwind

Bite my tongue, just for fun

Where is my mind?

Pad these walls… ignore the calls

I must be crazy

Hear the cries… my soul lies

Visions hazy

       “Just do it

       kill yourself

       do the world a favor”

I cannot lie… the voice inside

Says take my life

So I jump to fly

I fall and cry

But cannot die

So wrap me up, strap me up

Throw away the key

It’s obvious this padded room

Is the end of me,

 

 

Author's Note

Read and review please :)

Reviews

[Maja]

Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this write and I am glad you as a reader enjoyed :) Thank you

[Nadia B.]

Great use of rhyme and a very strong use of fear emotion to capture the reader. Was similar to reading a short horror story. One can feel the anguish and the fear, the wanting to find an escape from such a hell. Also great use of punctuation to make the reader 'hear' the person screaming the words "Shut them up," very effective in setting the mood and tone of your poem. Thank you for sharing this work of art, thought I must add I feel for anyone who has had to go through this, ...please keep writing!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Nadia :) I have witnessed this and it's a total roller coaster... an 8 hour shift of watching someone to make sure they don't kill their self it's completely exhausting. Not to mention 4 different voices talking to you but all coming from one person. It's completely crazy... I am glad you liked it :)

[Nadia B.]

...I'd suggest keeping a bottle of holy water nearby, also that must take some serious mental strength to witness and walk way after still sane. Also a lot of compassion to be willing to sit there and care for someone so that they don't hurt themselves, especially when they have no control. ...Wow!

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah it's definitely crazy... I always have a bottle of holy water :)

[B]

Oh my
What an intense write
The padded room might be the mind in a tangle

I see the angles of distress and confusion
The withdrawal of the world

A tightness
That can only be resolved

With a nice book
And a cone of ice cream - vanilla flavor swirled on the perfect crispy biscuit cone lol

[AaronFreitas]

haha I am definitely down for some ice cream :) lol I can't imagine being locked up in a padded room I think my mind would just explode! Appreciate your review :)

[B]

Ice cream away the padded room lol

[dan]

I've never been kept in a padded room but the thought processes sound very familiar. It's questionable to me how isolation is supposed to benefit one with such mental impairment and ideation; it would seem that the starkness of the isolation would allow more bad thoughts to flow unabated. A very perceptive write, Aaron. Well done! take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Dan. I mentioned in some responses that I've had to watch someone in a padded room and on suicide watch and it's definitely an experience unlike any other. One man in particular would talk in 3 or 4 different voices... his voice, a softer voice and a demonic creepy voice. The last was a screaming yelling voice sometimes and it was just crazy to witness a conversation within one amongst several voices out loud. I am glad you liked it buddy :)

[dan]

Aaron, Did you work in a psychiatric treatment facility? I believe what you say, but I been there/done that, on suicide watch but they just strapped me down to a bed with no sheets, no way to reach a wall....yeah, it was about as fun as it sounds. take care...dan

[micky]

Wow Aaron I think this is my new fav poem....
I love every single thing about this piece it is beyond my words....I love really really love this piece it is amazing

Thank you :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Micky... I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was hoping for something a little different and a little erratic so I am glad it's enjoyed by you :)

[micky]

I really like the flow the rhythm is excellent I really hope you write more pieces like this piece

[AaronFreitas]

I will definitely try my best :)

[Reeg]

this is really good!
It is written very well and in a unique way that works for the poem. This really is a piece of art.
Really, i wish i could give more input than that but overall its just a damn good poem.
Good Shtuff (:

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Reeg... I tried to do unique and just something a little different. Glad you liked it :)

[Mitali Shah]

Good one Aaron. Its strange, weird and hard to digest that loneliness often kills oneself and takes away all the hope of their existence. Even if we want to we fail to overcome at times its so very dangerous. Thanks for sharing :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Mitali... I definitely wouldn't want to experience it thats for sure! I appreciate your review :)

[Mitali Shah]

God bless Aaron :)

[andrew mitchell]

A great write about the terrible things people went through in mental institutions and the like

[AaronFreitas]

It is definitely a touchy subject... I couldn't imagine being restrained like that I'd go crazy too! haha appreciate your review buddy :)

[sereenaoutloud]

Aaron this is brilliant...you feel the change in pace throughout that manic feeling, the isolation. Such a sad dark write but you wrote it beautifully my friend !! Love it

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Sereena... I was shooting for good flow yet kind of erratic. I mentioned in another response that I've observed someone in a padded suicide room and it's crazy. One day 3 different voices and the next total temporary normal. I actually get to testify on a 3rd strike case... incident when I worked in the jail but the guys 3rd strike is an assault against me. He is in a mental hospital for the mean time but he belongs in a straight jacket and padded room... I heard different voices come out of him that would make the devil ask who that way haha... appreciate your review :)

[R Smith]

great sense of isolation in this one, although the subject of the story seems to be poking fun at himself and everything involved in his incarceration, its like his mind is clear and can see the problem but the voices come and catch him out just when he feels secure driving him to self harm, as is said at the end this padded room is the end of him because when you're in there the door to freedom ceases to exist everywhere is the padding, great writing Aaron you got the sense of madness and seclusion just right :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Richard. I've had the opportunity to have to sit and observe and I guess keep safe someone in a straight jacket and padded room. It's definitely crazy. I mentioned in another response I have talk to someone wanting to die and yelling out the craziest stuff you can imagine in 2 or 3 different voices then go back a week later and they are smiling and fine. It's definitely crazy to witness so I tried to create that kind of erratic thought process in this write. Glad you liked it :)

[Saddam]

Distract, Depression, Distance with nature...
This is an outstanding write, Flowing and it is heating the mind.
Saddest but creative expression.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Saddam... I tried something a little different... tried getting into the mind of someone in that situation. I have witnessed someone in a straight jacket and on suicide watch so it helps to see the truth in it. Thanks for your review my friend :)

[Saddam]

....and you are success in it. Great job bro.