Padded Walls

Something different... no not about me :)

Wrap me up... strap me up

Throw away the key

Locked in a room, I lay to spoon

With a shadow of me

      Shut them up!!!

      Tell them to stop!!!

      These voices wont cease!

Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e

Thoughts unwind

Bite my tongue, just for fun

Where is my mind?

Pad these walls… ignore the calls

I must be crazy

Hear the cries… my soul lies

Visions hazy

       “Just do it

       kill yourself

       do the world a favor”

I cannot lie… the voice inside

Says take my life

So I jump to fly

I fall and cry

But cannot die

So wrap me up, strap me up

Throw away the key

It’s obvious this padded room

Is the end of me,

 

 

Author's Note

Read and review please :)

Reviews

[Maja]

Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this write and I am glad you as a reader enjoyed :) Thank you

[....................]

Photo, poem and format, all play an instrumental part in describing for us the broken mind - a person at the end of their rope. However, though you may not have intended this, I do see hope in the plea from one who KNOWS he has no where else to turn... this is a very creative write, my friend, and one that draws for us a stark picture of a mind in chaos... well-done!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much FT! I was saying in another response I've seen a guy talk in four different voices and it's as if they all have a voice and conversation through him out loud. I was standing there in aww trying to figure out what was going on haha... a week later I show up for work and the guy is back in a normal jail cell and smiling like it never happened... talking normal and it was just something else to witness. The mind is an extremely powerful thing... appreciate your review :)

[Sindu]

This is fun and interesting. And very scary what that person must face, own mind plotting against him. who wouldn't go crazy in that white padded walled room and nothing one can do. Amazing wording and flow.

[AaronFreitas]

It is hard to imagine your own mind plotting against us... I mean getting sad is hard enough but imagine different voices non stop telling you many different things. It's a crazy topic. Glad you enjoyed it Sindu... appreciate the review :)

[kclyaine]

I don't understand the part where the person said:
"So I jump to fly
I fall and cry
But cannot die"

I"m pretty sure the person was going to do suicide. Or is it simply the person's imagination when he/she tried to kill itself.

I never understand the feeling of being driven by insanity but as I try to feel empathy to those people who have mental disabilities, I tried thinking of the cause, whether was it the surroundings, parents, peers, or the whole society itself. If we take away the cause then no one would have to suffer from it.

[AaronFreitas]

So those words... picture a guy sitting on a bed in a straight jacket voices in his head telling him to kill himself. He stands up and jumps as if he is jumping off a building feeling like he's flying but only falls face first since he's locked in a padded room and just lays there crying because he cannot end the pain and stop the voices in his head. I actually got to witness a woman jump from a bunkbed in jail and try to slam her head to kill herself... so I kind of pictured something like that. To understand someone in that mindset... well... if I hadn't had the experiences in seeing people in that state I probably wouldn't understand what to write. In words it's hard to do it justice because it is so erratic and crazy. Hope that helps... appreciate your feedback :)

[kclyaine]

Did she die? And are you a police? A doctor? Or a psycho therapist?

[AaronFreitas]

Nope she lived... put in a suicide cell with a suicide vest on for 48 hours and back to her cell. I used to work in a jail but not no more. Now I'm a drug dealer and pimp... jk lol

[Vanesa Markovic]

I've always had such a love/hate relationship with mental instability.
For all it's torture, it gives abundant creative force.
A very interesting theme, your rhyming is on point and the structure really makes it an experience.
Nice work,
-VM

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Vanesa :) I tried to give a good flow and rhyming scheme yet still make it erratic and kind of crazy to fit the mind of someone going through that. mental instability is no joke.. getting to see that first hand is a life-changing experience. I once had to drag a guy (I worked in a jail) into the shower with 2 other officers. Then when he was in there he was just gone mentally and stared at me completely lost. It took like 10 minutes to get him to understand how to push the button to get the water on... it was crazy! Thought I'd share :) Appreciate your review

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I don't usually read
pieces like this but I
have one that is scarier then this
a Asylum poem I don't write many
poems like that either but makes
me think of the Asylums
with people that were crazy or lost
their mind and
had a dramatic
stress break down,


Some where just kind
souls getting better and some where
not kind souls there's
good and bad in the world
I've seen and felt it from people someone
Without a sound mind has
demons and mentally insane and I mean someone
that would harm you not someone
that needs meds for depression there's a difference
In sad depression and dark demonic.


You were right on target with this
Piece seems like unsound minded soul
over thinking and thinking too much causes
depression and
us to go nuts
and traumatic stress breakdown too.


So I'm very careful
with my body and mind the mind brain
and heart and bones and muscles can be very fragile it is why we must
recharge no matter our age don't stress and worry
God made us to love when
we worry and have any negativity
or negative thinking it harms us
it's a toxic chemical like
cancer all of causes
cancer so many don't know that.


People can break their mind and brain
over thinking some
have been know to bust
a brain cell ya know
writers not taking a
break to me that's
what causes writers
block and them to hurt their
wrists over using things.



Thank you for sharing.

I had to take a peek and check it out.

God bless Benita

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for your awesome review Benita :) I mentioned in a few other responses that I had the chance to work where I had to watch someone in a padded cell and on suicide watch. It is definitely something to witness and I don't think any words can re-create the feeling and experience. A guy once talked to himself in 4 different voices... I was watching and he had his normal voice, talked real soft like an inner voice, a demonic voice and a screaming/yeling voice. It was crazy to hear all four in a conversation from one guy... then turn around and a week later he is laughing and seemingly normal. Definitely a life changing experience to see someone lose completely control of their mind that way. Appreciate your review Benita :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome. :)

[Luna Chan]

there was a time that I felt like this before I found my bf and now im happier but I still think about the times that I wanted to kill myself because I felt that no one would notice me missing. dark times. I hate thinking about it because when I do, I get worse and worse and it sucks big time. sorry for the super long review!

[AaronFreitas]

I think it's completely normal to go through those dark times... everyone has their reasons and it sucks. Luckily I've never been in a straight jacket and padded room but I swear sometimes life feels that way anyways haha... appreciate the review :)

[yvo miki]

Wow didn't think u thought that way 😢😢😢😭😭😭😭

[AaronFreitas]

It's not me... I was saying in other responses I had to watch someone in a straight jacket and padded room on suicide watch and it was crazy! He talked in 4 different voices... his voice, inner voice, demon voice and screaming voice. It was crazy to witness it... so thought I'd do a crazy write like that experience :) No tears my friend

[Emily]

This is my favorite poem of yours!!
This really inspires me!
Keep it up!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Emily :) That means a lot :D

[Destiny Dreamer]

Ahh... very Dark and yet breathtaking ... You know right now I'm wonder-struck... It's very Intense! I felt every single word. As usual, Thanks for sharing such an Awesome Poetry with us! I loved loved this ONE!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Dreamer... I got to observe someone in this situation before and it was an intense situation... definitely crazy for sure. I tried to make the write just as crazy... I am glad you liked it :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

I loved it.. GREAT WORK!

[AaronFreitas]

You are too kind my friend :)

[Rana]

That picture you've put there, it's quite creepy and striking and had me looking at it for a while. The poem was entertaining, I liked the structure and rhyming pattern, it was something different. Only you could add or take away a few words here and there to make it flow even better. Enjoyed this piece, it's even got an inviting title!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... I tried to keep flow but also a little erratic to make it a little different.. was trying something a little different to see if people liked it... I know I enjoyed writing it :) appreciate your review Rana :)