Padded Walls

Something different... no not about me :)

Wrap me up... strap me up

Throw away the key

Locked in a room, I lay to spoon

With a shadow of me

      Shut them up!!!

      Tell them to stop!!!

      These voices wont cease!

Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e

Thoughts unwind

Bite my tongue, just for fun

Where is my mind?

Pad these walls… ignore the calls

I must be crazy

Hear the cries… my soul lies

Visions hazy

       “Just do it

       kill yourself

       do the world a favor”

I cannot lie… the voice inside

Says take my life

So I jump to fly

I fall and cry

But cannot die

So wrap me up, strap me up

Throw away the key

It’s obvious this padded room

Is the end of me,

 

 

Author's Note

Read and review please :)

Reviews

[Maja]

Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this write and I am glad you as a reader enjoyed :) Thank you

[~]

Mmm.. it reminded me of a song. you should watch this one Aaron
https://youtu.be/Bo1z0cyYEr4
:D :D

[AaronFreitas]

lol that is an awesome video... yeah pretty much like that just not as cool haha... thanks for sharing that you got a big smile out of me and a beat I can't get out of my head lol :D

[~]

Hehehehe :D you're welcome.

[TheOne&Only]

Very intense!! Another great write my friend!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my Brazilian friend :) Appreciate your review

[Willard Wells]

Reminded me of the old days when many were locked up. Now we have gone to an extreme the other way and not taking care of the problem which is for the most part seen in our homeless population. Very nice piece and well written. I feel sorry for anyone in this situation. They have little or no control.


I have always said the only reason they don't lock me up for being crazy is the voices don't both me.. You remember the playthings. haha

[AaronFreitas]

haha I hear ya... I can drive a few miles and see some wacked out people fighting these thoughts free and roaming the streets. The thought came to me earlier because I've been on suicide watch... working not myself suicidal lol... it's definitely crazy to see someone in that state of mind and to talk to them when they come out of it. I tried to replicate that into words the best I could :)

[Ilerah]

Wow really deep, thought I had read most of yours. Good job Aaron, descriptive, and well written.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ilerah...this was something I put together earlier because I was bored... I've had to watch people on suicide watch and stuff before and it's just crazy... I tried to keep the write that way. Appreciate your review :)

[Ilerah]

Glad to review.

[Frozen Eyes]

Wow thats a mental roller coaster ride u gave me here.. Love it.. *thumbsup*

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you :) I was trying to create just a mental roller coaster kind of twisted write from that perspective... I appreciate you feedback and I'm glad you loved it :)

[erinwrites]

This is really great! I'm definitely a fan of the darker stories so I really enjoyed this.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Erin :) I appreciate that... I wanted to try something a little different... enter the mind of that character. Glad you liked it :)

[Melinda McQueen]

Wow.. I'm not sure what to say.
It's an emotional write.
It did something to my heart that I can't explain...
Feeling despite... feeling fragile...

[AaronFreitas]

It's definitely a massive struggle for a person in there. I can't imagine it. I actually have seen people in this situation... I still have to testify on a 3rd strike case... right now the guy is in a mental hospital and has been in and out of the padded room. I tried to make the write a little sporadic like the mind yet different.. it was worth a try. Hope you liked it :)

[BLitZeD]

i like it , nice pace to it

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... tried to keep the pace up on it... someone in a padded room isn't thinking slow and collective.

[I Am Svetlana]

It's so saddening to see how being alone can destroy a persons mind and drive them quick to insanity. I've actually had dreams of me being in a padded room in a straight jacket and I woke up short of breath because it had felt so real...great write and the rhyming works perfectly to help make it flow.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Svetlana... I kind of broke it up rhyming... then him yelling out loud... then stanzas and the voice in his head before the finale. I've actually witnessed people in a straight jacket and in a suicide room and it's a different vibe... I appreciate your review and compliment :)

[I Am Svetlana]

I really enjoyed how you broke up the different voices. I forgot to mention that, but I felt it was something really clever and gave it a certain deeper tone. Rooms like that would be scary, but it'd be an interesting experience.

[AaronFreitas]

I don't know what I would do if I got strapped up and thrown in a room like that... probably be just as crazy haha... I tried to break up the voices... I'm glad you caught that :)

[I Am Svetlana]

I wouldn't know what to do either if I was put in a room like that. I'm so used to moving around, but a straight jacket would put me in such an uncomfortable mental state. I would hate it.

[AaronFreitas]

lets hope neither of us are ever in one :)