A Painful Day

A Painful Day

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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This one is about a moment, a day that was one of the worst days of my life. Open to your interpretation :)

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The pain still lingers from that depressing day,

I wanted it so bad only for it to blow away.

The agony, the heart break, too much to take;

Crying in my sleep but not wanting to awake.

 

My heart was broken, cut and left bleeding

And I couldn’t see where this was leading.

That horrible moment replays in my mind,

This is a wound that doesn’t heal with time.

 

I shut my emotions off to avoid the pain,

Dysfunction becomes the way I stay sane.

I wonder if someday this wound will heal…

Or is this an illusion and none of it’s real?

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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AaronFreitas
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Wounds may heal but scares will replace your old wounds but at least the pain has swayed. Sometimes I also get the feeling that my mind is playing tricks with me and shutting of the emotions is indeed a way to feel no pain, but never forget: no pain, no gain. Pain is temporary, salvation is permanent.

Good job :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Nightfeather :) Appreciate your feedback :)



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Yes this could refer to many differnt relationship in our lives That led to pain anguish. The days when we could not see hope and numbing it out was the only way to get through the day!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sereenaoutloud

9 Years Ago

LOL...i like ya out look though...so true you cannot please everybody!! :))
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Never... but that's what's awesome... it helps us learn and grow :)
sereenaoutloud

9 Years Ago

I need to learn this ...im terrible at trying to please everybody.,,i know it is impossible but stil.. read more
The ambiguity of this piece makes it completely universal... any one of us here can take this and use it to describe the way we have felt about any tragedy in our own lives. The sadness, sense of hopelessness and uncertainty in this poem is clearly felt... well-done, Aaron!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much FT... that is kind of what I was going for since I didn't feel like my story wou.. read more
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I felt like this when Charlie George scored what turned out to be the winner in the 1971 FA cup final.My beloved Liverpool defeated.Nice write Aaron

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

haha see I am glad you could relate to it... and actually what you felt is the closest to what I fel.. read more
Firstly I am so glad you have written again,secondly this is amazing Aaron I was hooked from the first line,the amount of talent you harbor within yourself is so breath taking Aaron you have left me gasping for air and speechless once again. Well done my friend this is your best as of yet,so proud Aaron :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much micky :) I am glad you enjoyed it... I was hoping these words would connect wit.. read more
I can tell you took a lot of care with the rhyming and the rhythm. I don't like some of the wording in this poem, it comes across as somewhat cliche. I really enjoy the idea of dysfunction being the way you stay sane. I believe another reviewer said there's a lot of self-awareness in that line. I wrote a poem like this a couple weeks ago, where I liked the ideas a lot but I couldn't get the phrasing just right, and I held onto it for a couple days and something better came out of it. I agree with Willard about the vagueness making the pain seem a lot less authentic. Think about when someone posts a really vague Facebook status, like, "So depressed, wondering when this will ever end." It's deliberately vague so people will ask, "what's wrong?" and comes across as deliberately attention seeking. Hold on to this poem and try to write about what's really wrong, and see what you can do with the good bits of those.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I appreciate your feedback :) On this one I didn't write it so people would ask whats wrong... I wr.. read more
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My dear Aaron, whatever the reason for this pain, it remains the pain itself that is the outcome you are dealing with. I wish for you peace and release of this chain. ((( U )))

Posted 9 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you lynn... the feelings from this write are old and gone. I just had to put myself back into.. read more
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I known days like these

I like how open you are about all that you felt

I bet once you release it
It never comes back

Good one Aaron

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Yeah I released these feelings a long time ago... it's actually feelings from a particular moment ma.. read more
B

9 Years Ago

It feels good to do so ..... And i love your work
Have a great evening :)
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Nisreenaa :) You too
superb Aaron, thanks for sharing this, I do connect with these words of yours that perfectly define the flow and pain. God Bless :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I am glad you connect with these words Mitali... I was hoping many would :) Thank you for your revi.. read more
This is really amazing!, You are truly a great poet, I love every piece you write and especially this one! The rhyming is spot on! I just love it!! Keep it coming, I look forward to reading your next poem!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Tee :) The rhyming... I think it's just a habit from when I used to write a lot.. read more
"Dysfunction becomes the way I stay sane." - Excellent self awareness Aaron! :) You did a great job with this poem! :)

Perhaps things are different now, and you have already decided that you no longer need certain behaviors to help you survive, even though those behaviors were valuable, and useful during times of survival. We know when "dysfunction" no longer helps, but instead hinders, and then we let go of the dysfunction. I have gone through difficult times, but I can tell you something that I know is true for me, once I was ready, and not fighting for my survival.

Undesirable feelings are a gift to me. They shine a light on parts of me that are hidden. When these hidden parts are seen, I am given the opportunity to heal them. When I heal parts of me that are in pain, I gain power, and the chains that were binding me, are removed, and I am set free. Every hardship, disappointment, unfulfilled desire, angry, or fearful moment can teach me about myself, and help me understand what is important to me, and what I desire from my life. Also, people can no longer use my wounds as weapons against me, because I now own all of me.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I also feel like those undesirable feelings are a gift... I am able to recognize them much better..... read more

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