I could feel it… she was standing there
watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok
but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she
looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in
reality we are never really alone are we?
Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf
I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Than.. read moreI hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Thanks for stopping by buddy
Yes it is... also on a different night woke up with scratches on my upper back/shoulder and a little.. read moreYes it is... also on a different night woke up with scratches on my upper back/shoulder and a little blood on my blanket. No fun I probably need some holy water or something but it's been good lately :)
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Oh, but as soon as you let your gaurd down it'll get nasty again. x3
I wake up with scratches.. read moreOh, but as soon as you let your gaurd down it'll get nasty again. x3
I wake up with scratches and bruises all the time, but then I have cats jumping all over me like a trampoline all night.
This was super scary and an absolutely spot on writeup! Now I'll probably be afraid to sleep alone or what I think of as ''alone'' :'D I especially liked the way you used ''subconsciously'' to depict that the experience was out of the physical world. Beautifully written, Aaron! Hats off! :)
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Thank you very much Bushra.... I was hoping it would be a little scary haha... appreciate your revie.. read moreThank you very much Bushra.... I was hoping it would be a little scary haha... appreciate your review :)
Wow, was she pretty at least? ;);) I hope so! A good question that opens a whole can of worms, so I won't go there, but a fun and thought provoking write for sure :D
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Thank you moonskittles... more like a shadow than anything... she could at least come cuddle with me.. read moreThank you moonskittles... more like a shadow than anything... she could at least come cuddle with me lol
That last sentence gave me the chills! Who knows what could be watching us at any given time. A person, a demon, an angel, some ghostly entity, who knows! This poem is a good reminder to stay on your toes, because you never know what could happen.
And the fact that this happened to you makes it extra chilling! :)
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I appreciate your review Amber... it is creep to think at all times there is something or someone wa.. read moreI appreciate your review Amber... it is creep to think at all times there is something or someone watching us and we don't know. I know... it probably makes me sounds like a tweaker or something haha... but yeah... I've had some experiences with spirits and it's scary. Thank you Amber :)
We are not alone, I know this for a fact. You have to learn to acknowledge this and live with "it" in peace. Good luck :)
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Yes indeed... I have and no complaints here :) It does get lonely here alone... at least she's my f.. read moreYes indeed... I have and no complaints here :) It does get lonely here alone... at least she's my friend lol... appreciate your review :)
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Of course! This topic is right up my alley, glad to discuss :]
A interesting poem. When I was stationed in Germany. I lived in old building. The sounds were many in the night. You set-up place and vision for the reader. I like the poetry that ask questions. Your poem did. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
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Thank you very much Coyote... always glad to hear your thoughts :) Don't ever be shy load me up wit.. read moreThank you very much Coyote... always glad to hear your thoughts :) Don't ever be shy load me up with read requests I love your work. Appreciate your feedback :)
whoa......creepy......
yes we are never truly alone.......
amazing write......
i loved it!!!
:)
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Thank you very much Pushkar.... it is creepy and we never are alone my friend. Glad you liked it bu.. read moreThank you very much Pushkar.... it is creepy and we never are alone my friend. Glad you liked it buddy :)
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..