Are we alone?

Real short true story... this was me last night.

I could feel it… she was standing there watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

 

Author's Note

Let me know your thoughts

Reviews

[alf]

Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf

[AaronFreitas]

I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Thanks for stopping by buddy

[alf]

Cool!! I'll keep reading your writes!!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you buddy I appreciate that

[Einahpets2012]

I really like this piece :D

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you... and it's a true story... one of my crazy nights in this house I live in :)

[Mayank Sharma]

Loved the simplicity of the poem.Did it really happen?? It is hard to believe,especially for me,since I don't believe in such things.

[AaronFreitas]

yes it did... I know what I saw and it scared the s**t out of me haha... enough to have a bottle of holy water on my nightstand just in case lol

[Mayank Sharma]

😂

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Yes I truly saw her also one night she was watching me and she was wearing a mini skirt then with needles I poke her eyes and her hair fell off and now her head turned bald and skully with sockets where her eyes used to be and now she can only hear me

Now I sleep with a baseball bat next to my bed in case the lesbian demoness wants to get near first base so that I could smash her bones

[AaronFreitas]

Lmao that's classic! I can't lie I have a baseball bat by my bed too lol... thanks for your review :) Glad to see you also haven't seen ya in a while

[Bear]

Haunting's are so hard to prove to outsides, could it be because they happen in the mind first? I know my mother is with me as well as a sister and many friends though they no longer walk the earthly plain, so the answer to your question is NO we are never really alone! Thanks for making my memories of loved ones even stronger with your poem, Standing O my friend!

[AaronFreitas]

We never are really alone. I think I some more of these stories to share with the cafe... I just gotta sit down and write them :)

[Suzy Hazelwood]

This is excellent Aaron, short, but very clean and sharp - says what it needs to and reads smoothly. Almost like the beginning of a good short story or even a novel. I like that very much, it has great intrigue in that short paragraph, makes the reader want to read more. I'm wondering now, what could be coming next???!! :o0

[AaronFreitas]

I've been thinking of expanding on this since it did so well and I got good reviews :) If I do more with it I'll surely let you know :D

[Suzy Hazelwood]

Yes, please do, I'd be very interested to see where it goes.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This short piece is well described and you have captured the emotion of that experience well and succinctly Aaron

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you John... sometimes it's hard to describe what we don't know... this was all I could do :)

[erinwrites]

Liked this a lot, I agree with your message

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Erin :)

[Ana B.]

I think we are what our mind allows us to be....indeed we're not alone, yet can we handle the ''company'' though.....a thought full write

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ana! I am so glad to see you back on here... I did miss you my friend and noticed you gone :) The mind is a powerful thing... we can also lose control of it and that is scary. :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the warm welcome my friend, and yes, you're right....minds are a scary thing....but i'm sure we always have what we can handle...

[Tania]

"are we alone?" That is a question with an answer which we all are waiting for.... Interesting little poem ..
Good job :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you.... I know we aren't... some of the stuff I've see is proof of other things in this world with us :) Appreciate your review :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

OH GOD.. It reminds me of the Film "oculus " It is a horror movie. Amazing write. Simply, you have described the situation.. Umm I would say, PERFECTLY! :) Good luck :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Dreamer... not sure if I've heard of it... I'll have to see if it's on netflix :) Appreciate your review my friend :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

You are WELCOME! :) You should check it out, it's amazing :)

[AaronFreitas]

I gotta find a friend to watch it with me... I'm a scaredy cat watching scary movies alone lol

[Destiny Dreamer]

lOl.. Same here! :D I watched it with my Brother! :D