Are we alone?

Real short true story... this was me last night.

I could feel it… she was standing there watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

 

Author's Note

Let me know your thoughts

Reviews

[alf]

Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf

[AaronFreitas]

I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Thanks for stopping by buddy

[alf]

Cool!! I'll keep reading your writes!!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you buddy I appreciate that

[Ilerah]

I agree with the last line Aaron, we are never really alone. Not only that, but i enjoyed reading the short story. It was, by definition, short and in that well written.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ilerah... appreciate it very much. I tried to keep it short figured most people don't want to read anything long anyways haha

[sara]

This has an impact, well done. I can relate as well, little bits of paranoia get all of us sometimes.

[AaronFreitas]

Haha yes it does Sara... appreciate the feed back :)

[Haley Wilson]

If there's anyone that can leave an impact with just a few sentences, it's you. This is painfully accurate and resonates in the mind for a long time!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Haley... I appreciate your compliment :)

[Mirjana Ilic]

This is interesting. It's the question that arises every time we hear a thud or a shuffle in the middle of the night or even during the day when all is silent except for the that one noise that sends a slight shiver down the length of our entire body. Of course my first thought was, "That's it?" mostly because this sort of thing interests me... but sometimes less is better and this is enough to get me thinking. It might even inspire me.

I enjoyed reading this and I'm glad I came across it. Well done :)

[AaronFreitas]

Haha I have been thinking of working on the story to make it more of a story. When I wrote it I wasn't sure if it was really worthy of a story or not but I wanted to just tell what happened. If I work on more I'll let you know :)

[Mirjana Ilic]

Sounds great :)

[W R Stowe]

I wrote one with the same title did you ever see it? But you're right we aren't really alone we have a Spiritual world encompassed around us

Bill

[AaronFreitas]

No I'll have to check it out... send me a read request. There is definitely a spiritual world all around us :) Thanks buddy

[W R Stowe]

Will do and your welcome

[modtoddinc]

Ooo. The shadow knows. I like the mystery and the unsaid idea of your own shadow (dualism) present. nice work.

~peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Todd.... appreciate it buddy :)

[silent poet]

We are never alone, I love how you're simple at times with your writing . Simplicity is enough when getting out what you choose to share with others. Nice write Aaron..

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend. I try to keep it simple I'm not real into the big word deceptive writes much. Appreciate your review Silent poet :)

[silent poet]

You're very welcome:)

[JP142000]

Great Job. Shows character as a writer and skill as a poet. Really enjoyed it.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Jessica... I may try and do more with this story and/or more with the crazy stuff that happens with spirits and stuff to me. Appreciate your review

[Ashley Flynn]

What exactly do you mean when you say you awoke "subconsciously"?

[AaronFreitas]

Thats a good question lol... I was thinking the way your subconscious processes things... I'm laying in bed and wake up because my subconscious can feel the presence of someone and while I am looking I am asleep but my subconscious is awake processing whats going on... almost like when someone is sleep walking if any of that makes sense :)